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Picture of You |
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zarina Member
since 2001-05-19
Posts 180
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It's you. Just a picture og you, but still you. It's then best pic I've seen.. -The look on your face- I have no words. I love this picture. Altrough I know it wasnt for me.. your look your smile your eyes, yeah, well, all of it. It wasn't for me. But still I love it. Cause it so you.. The way I always wanted you to be. The way you never were -never for me- But I forgive you And all I ask of is this.. This picture of you. Cause Then you'll always be here, And I'll remember you ..The way you should be.. ..The way I loved you.. The real you. -the ending of this poem is not that good.. I should try too work a bit more on it. But... I'll post it anyway.. - |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
This isn't bad at all. I think it was very emotional, and from your heart. That's the best kind of work. Jenn "If it's wrong to love you, then my heart just won't let me be right, cause I'm drowned in you, and I won't pull through without you by my side." Mari |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i liked it the emotions in this poem...i enjoyed this quite a bit...great job and keep writing...  ..?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
i liked this one. full of emotion. good job It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done......emotion filled.  |
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