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Teen Poetry #4

choose the dance

Godsend_1
Member

since 2001-04-19

Posts 247
great state of illinois

0 posted 2001-05-25 04:45 PM

some just scoff, some just laugh
some just dance
to the sound of magic and mystery

pour out my life blood
soul spilled upon the ground
mind long lost to this song

magic songs casting a serene spell
wishing life continued right
long lost powers fading into night

mystery songs of peaceful confusings
not understanding, but ok with it all
singing in rhyme to continue confusion

death seed planted, and growth begins
vines wrap and trap your mind
squeeze till all thought dies

which is your true dance
i know mine
do you know yours

i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be..so deal with it
to make the world the greatest place is the perfect dream in

keoni
Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

1 posted 2001-05-25 04:56 PM

I liked this one. I have to admit it was a little hard to follow at times, but it was still really good.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

2 posted 2001-05-26 01:14 AM

graet poem!...i enjoyed the read a lot...thanks for sharing it and hope to see more ben...

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ahhhhh....i'm addicted to passions in poetry!!!!!

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-26-2001).]

fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

3 posted 2001-05-26 01:18 AM

hey,
well it's kinda late so when i first read that i was like "huh?? riiiiiiight..." but then i re-read it and found it pretty kool. good work :-) keeeep writin!
-fear-

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-05-26 06:41 PM

The ending was kind of weak in my opinion. I liked the poem though and I hope to see more Ben.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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