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lonely*soul
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since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

0 posted 2001-05-23 04:23 PM

Distance
By: Kim

Longing to see your face
Longing to hear your voice
Longing to see your smile
But I sit back with no choice

No choice whether or not
I want to be a part of you
No choice whether or not
I want to love you

The miles between us
Keep me confined
To the small-minded life I lead
This distance keeps me blind

Everything turns right
When I speak to you
Words flow out my fingertips
Thoughts I never knew

Things I never thought of
Things I wouldn’t have to face
And all because my lonely self
Is stuck in this empty place

This place leads me to depression
And a forlorn empty heart
And all because the many miles
That keep you and me apart

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-05-23 04:56 PM

wow!...i loved this poem...so real yet full of deep emotions...great job kim

...and hope things work out for u...this was a truly nice poem...thnaks for sharing it...and keep writing...

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

the_rescue
Member

since 2001-05-23

Posts 316
Japan

2 posted 2001-05-23 06:03 PM

nice poem, I like the way it's set up and such I'll be reading some more of your stuff and thanx for the critiques on mine.

lonely*soul
Member

since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

3 posted 2001-05-23 06:43 PM

thanx guys..i wrote it while go bout this guy chris i used to be really close with that lives in my old town...once i get over this writers block ill post some more

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-05-23 06:48 PM

Very well done here. I enjoyed this one. Hope the distance shortens.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

5 posted 2001-05-23 07:56 PM

This is beautiful Kimmie. I like the fingertips part. Made me think it's a chat love but i guess not. But still, beautiful

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

6 posted 2001-05-24 08:09 AM

Restriction can definately be a pain but you put it in such a wonderful poem

~*brittt*~
Member

since 2001-05-09

Posts 76
East Haddam, CT

7 posted 2001-05-25 08:45 AM

Kimmie:
Somehow I knew who this was about before you said it. This was a really great poem. I love u hun.
~britt~

vixengrl04
Member

since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

8 posted 2001-05-25 10:15 AM

Hey Kimmie I definitely like this one, it's reallly good. Nice work here, I love all your poems hun they are really a reflection of your emotions...

~*nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

9 posted 2001-05-25 10:51 AM

wow...this was good...i love the simplisity of it...loved it!!

"Life is not long and boring,
it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

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