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Allysa

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since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2001-05-23 11:08 AM

Talked to you on the phone last night,
you did most of the talking,
I did most of the listening.

Talked to you on the phone last night,
I didn't say anything for fifteen minutes,
did you even wonder why?

Talked to you on the phone last night,
and like many other times,
I didn't feel like I would ever be good enough for you.

Talked to you on the phone last night,
I'm sorry about what I said,
and I'm sorry for hanging up.

Talked to you on the phone last night,
are you sorry for what you said?
Are you sorry you hurt my feelings?

Talked to you on the phone last night,
you said you were sorry,
but did you really mean it?

I never feel good enough for you,
It feels like you are 100 times better than me,
for everything I do, you do something better.
For ever song I play, you find something better.

I never feel strong enough to tell you,
that I feel like Jesica's my fault,
that I never called her,
and I hate the way I feel.

Talked to you on the phone last night,
and it made me love you more.

I know you're in a better place and though I cannot see your face, I know you're smiling down on me, saying everything's okay. ~R Kelly (I wish)

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-05-23 01:08 PM

a lot of emotions swirled up in this one....I liked it

SEA

DarkSilver
Junior Member

since 2001-05-21

Posts 33
Six O'clock High!

2 posted 2001-05-23 01:15 PM

very meaningful

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-05-23 05:13 PM

sad yet full of emotions...u wrote it so well...i hope thinsg turn out best for u...

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-05-23 06:33 PM

Allysa, do you have a low self esteem?
Anyhow, I felt this was quite the sad poem.
Very emotional piece.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

5 posted 2001-05-23 07:02 PM

Very emotional and sad piece. I think this is the second poem of yours that has referred back to your friend Jesica. I hope things get better for you soon. Stay Strong...=)

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

6 posted 2001-05-24 10:59 AM

I don't have very low self esteem. It was just a bad day. Everything's better now.

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

7 posted 2001-05-24 11:47 AM

*HUG* this is a beautiful peom, i the emotion is truly beautiuful. i'm sorry you were feeling this way, i hope things are better noe. this goes into my library.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

kaile

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since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

8 posted 2001-05-24 12:41 PM

i like the way how your poem revolved around the repetition line...nicely done

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

9 posted 2001-05-24 02:20 PM

This had a lotta meaning to it..good job

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

10 posted 2001-05-25 03:42 PM

thanks you three. Well, c yas!

I know you're in a better place and though I cannot see your face, I know you're smiling down on me, saying everything's okay. ~R Kelly (I wish)

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

11 posted 2001-05-29 06:09 PM

Allysa, I'm glad to see your answer to Dopey's question. What's goign on with your soap opera life

~*hugs*~

I'm so sorry for doubting you Kit ... please forgive me!!!!

Alyssa

Member

since 2001-05-30

Posts 385
IM ENGAGED!!!!!

12 posted 2001-05-30 06:08 PM

Hey!!!! this is good!
i like it alot!
it reminds me of a song or something.
keep posting!

--± Ålyssa ±--

Marshalzu

Member Elite

since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

13 posted 2001-05-30 08:23 PM

Great work Allysa, glad to see your reply to Dopey... Stay happy

Zu

cherish
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since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

14 posted 2001-05-30 08:27 PM

i love the progression you made in this poem...you did it very well..i loved the ending ...ahhhhh..if only life continued that way....great poem allysa...

...keep posting..