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A good read - I promise
| Teen Poetry #4 |
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A good read - I promise |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA 
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Well, here it is, my hailing comeback. lol, yeah right. I'm a lot better now though, and I'll have poems aobut what happened to me, or one anyway, well one more, ANYWAY! Crap comes in this side and out the other The ones on the right against me with one another The ones on my left, are always there to help But half treat me as a puny little whelp Of the right, they don’t respect Of me, they think they know all aspect They start conflict and spite in me But when I start to open their eyes, they flee Others right are brick walls closed Audacious enough to think me unopposed To them dictating to me who I am When they can’t figure out their clan They cause all my anger, I hate these people They deserve to be tied, and hung from a steeple With my poetry, and my music, I will descend And raise bloody hell, their doom impend In all their number, they are a daunting force But they hold NO MORE sway to my course It will be them not me, to feel the pain of my heart They think they’re prepared, but they can’t even start The disrespectful left, are not very good They act like they care, but covered in a hood Never taking me seriously, never giving a damn They wouldn’t notice if I went from human to ham They just want to use you, suck you dry Your very life-force, to get it they try Some are on and off, lulling you in Then they turn real, and make you spin Ahh, the joyful part of my pathetic life The descent good, the opposite of rights With these few people, I would never stand To live my life, with death in my hand They’re the ones who as what’s wrong I speak to them once, and show them my song After that one sentence, they offer their shoulder And as with all of these left, support me like a boulder My mind could collapse, and they would care They would visit me daily, and fix my hair It’s those little things they always help you true Minor or serious problems, there through and through These people on the left, are your very spirit Put in front of you, so you can see, and clear it They reflect your best traits, and change the rest So that in the ultimate end, nobody can choose a best When my life fades and goes out of sight They will know what to do, with the remaining light My parents will come to them, and ask: “What was he like?” And one Left would go on and on, about this, my strike My poetry: My massive strike against fake friends Against hate on earth, the pain of betrayal, and life’s bends Those I hate: be happy I’m using words, and not pain Those of the left: I will cry for you, and never on your soul will there be a stain No angels in heaven nor demons below the sea, could ever dissever my soul from the soul of the beautiful Annabel Lee |
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punkrockerrobin 
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
wow!  awesome! i likes i likes i likes!!!I AM WHAT I AM SO DEAL! |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
I don't even know what to SAY, this is so awesome!!!! Nice work  ,Sara "A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I enjoyed this one and welcome back!  |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
Ow i hurt my jaw when it dropped open. That was amazing. "The heart can think of no devotion |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
graet poem!...it was very well written...i liekd it...hope to see more...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
Wow this was sooooooo good!!!! i REALLY REALLY like it. You have mucho talento *L* (i have no mucho talento in spanish hahaha) keep writing... i enjoy it. remember, writing is a weapon, much stronger then anything else. Valerie Why do you do what u do to me baby...you know if I could I'd do anything for you, please don't ignore me cause you know I adore you |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
This is PROLIFIC. Amazing... "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
wow, this was long, but worth the read!!! 1st ive read by you and im looking foward to seeing more! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Very much a good read though it's alittle too long You did good my friend keep it up and keep sharing thanks for the read hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Val, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Michel |
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Dr. Jo-Bizz Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 97 |
i liked the rythm... and you spoke with such forcefulness and passion.. i always appreciate that kind of writing as well... geez... what happened to make you so spunked at people? dr. jo-bizz But His word was in my heart |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
I like the flow, and I love the poem. I however don't think it's too long. I know of no poem that can be 'too long'. (sorry Acire!) I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again. |
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