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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
standing in the cross hairs trigger ready to be pulled i wait silently for the noise to sound and the pain to hit it does i die standing in the cross hairs trigger already pulled now laying silently after the noise sounded and the pain hit and i go on living [This message has been edited by Godsend_1 (edited 05-22-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
The poem was interpreted by me as symbolic. I hope I was correct about my interpretation of this poem. Regardless of everything though, I found the poem to be written well.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
great job ben...i enjoeyd this poem...written nicely...keep writing...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
great poem ben! like i told ya you're so much better than me. lata hun! robin  hboyI AM WHAT I AM SO DEAL! |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I definately hope I interpreted this correctly and it's not about violence towards yourself........Please note that we do have guidelines which we enforce regarding poetry depicting suicide, so should this or a future poem raise cause for concern in that regard, we will let you know. We care a great deal about the health and well-being of all our members, and we are pleased to include you in this grouping.  SEA |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Yes, as a symbolic poem, this was great. However kinda sad. If it was more literal, they'll cut you off at the knees around here!! LOL Jenn "If it's wrong to love you, then my heart just won't let me be right, cause I'm drowned in you, and I won't pull through without you by my side." Mari |
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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
no dont worry ppl it isnt about me killing myself its about a symbolic gun and all that no worries no suicide here ok sorry i new it might be iffy but i wanted to post it so there ya go btw they last line makes it more evedent that its not real i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be..so deal with it to make the world the greatest place is the perfect dream in [This message has been edited by Godsend_1 (edited 05-23-2001).] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Thanks for letting us know all is well Godsend ... we appreciate it. Best wishes, /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 05-23-2001).] |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I had second thoughts too  I did believe it was a symbolism of something though. That something I can't figure out  but, oh well....."So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I'm so glad..... |
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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
yea sorry for all the worry guys i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be..so deal with it |
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