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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
Can you feel my pain? do you see me out in the rain is there some reason for your stare or is that a question I shouldn't dare Believe me I really am Insane can't you feel my pain? there is a story behind each tear but I won't go into that here While you speak of Innocence I see your delusion only I know such purity as Illusion Can you feel my pain? A pain like being beaten by a cane Bringing you into my world would be a mistake to slowly drown you in this pain filled lake You can step out of the rain No need to feel this pain "It's too cold in the world...too cold to be alone..." - >¶Øʆ< |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
ok i liked this one alot toos!~!~! 'While you speak of Innocence I see your delusion only I know such purity as Illusion' i loved that *points* great job!~! tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i liked this piece a lot because you really seemed to capture a feeling of reckless thought with a tinge of insanity to it. this is an incredible piece, keep posting all your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
wow! Your work is amazing. Im really impressed by all your new poetry......amzing imagery and powerful impact. Regina "Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Nice job. I like the rhyme scheme, it works very well. Nicely done. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Not my fav by you but it was still a pleasant read. Keep posting.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
not bad at all. actually, it's a pretty good poem. keep it up and keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I thought this was really good. especially this stanza-- "Bringing you into my world would be a mistake to slowly drown you in this pain filled lake You can step out of the rain No need to feel this pain" Great job  |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
great poem...once again...i like your style of writing...i enjoyed this one a lot...hope to see more...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
this has so much passion in it. your descriptions are really superb "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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