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~*brittt*~ Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 76East Haddam, CT |
I know this is not my best work, far from it actually, but I had no other way to get my feelings out there. Everyone keeps telling me not to misss the guy b/c of the way he treated me, and they keep telling me there's no way I was in luv w/ him... if only they knew and could understand...here goes... I miss the way you'd smile at me The way you'd look into my eyes, The same look that made me weak, And now it makes me want to cry. I loved how when around you, I never felt alone, And now hoping that you'll call I spend hours by the phone. I hate you and how you blamed me For everything you'd start, But I hate myself even more For letting you break my heart. |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Britt this is good. It's not your fault he broke your heart, but you can prevent it from happening again.  ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this is very expressive of your hurt...I think you did a great job |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I like the rhyme scheme, but you might want to pay more attention to the syllable and meter scheme if you want it to sound better overall. I hope you pull through all of this, you shouldn't be angry at yourself for the past. If you can't forgive yourself, after all, who can you forgive? ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
awsome job britt i love ya...and i know me and nikki tell you hes not worth it and maybe in your heart he is..srry bout that, but dont be afrid to talk to us bout it, i wont judge! *KiMMiE* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
i liked this one. Well done.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
Hey, very good poem. I know EXACTLY how you feel. The way you feel was put very well into the poem, and it was one of my favorites of yours. I really related to this. Keep postin!  - Cody - |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
this was agreat poem that was heartfelt with emotions...u did well on expressing them...hope things get better for u  if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
this was soooooooo good. i absolutely love it. i put it up so hopefully my ex can see it and can feel like an ass. LOL thanks for the read. mos def goin in my lib. Valerie Why do you do what u do to me baby...you know if I could I'd do anything for you, please don't ignore me cause you know I adore you |
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corey14 Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 89Boston, Mass, U.S.A. |
hey britt great pome happened 2 me 1ns it stinks but thats a good way 2 get anger out live a little everyday and when its all over you will have lived a lot |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Loneliness...ugh its so hard ::hugs:: |
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HeAvEnS AnGeL Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 168The Hot Girl From Canada |
im going through this at the moment life sux trust me i know going in my library you did a great job |
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