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zarina
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since 2001-05-19

Posts 180

0 posted 2001-05-21 11:16 AM

-this was my first poem..

I think I was 12 when I wrote it..-

I feel Empty.
I feel Blue.
All I ever wanted was to be whit you.
I feel cold.
I feel sad.
Who'd knew it was so bad.
I feel unhappy.
I feel tragic.
Now it's not that magic.
I feel calm.
I feel terrible.
I didn't thougt it had to be so horrible.
I feel uncomfort.
I feel fear.
Why did you diseappear?
I feel lost.
I feel black.
Why don't you come back?
I don't feel proud.
I don't feel strong.
Why didn't you tell me what was wrong?
I feel like I'm going to die,
If you don't come back and tell me why...

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2001-05-21 11:34 AM

Wow....12 and you pulled this out? I really sucked when I was 12.....I hardly wrote when I was 12....Anyway....this was quite well done. I liked it....

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Linc

Senior Member

since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

2 posted 2001-05-21 11:36 AM

Hey,

Haha I like it and you were just 12 thats really good

until your next poem

-- Linc

Low Man's Lyric
Member

since 2001-04-03

Posts 236
In a dream

3 posted 2001-05-21 11:37 AM

This was really good, and you said you were 12? Wow I wasn't even into poetry then, great job this.

Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend."
~Anonymous

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

4 posted 2001-05-21 01:24 PM

someday i will get around to posting some stuff i wrote when i was 12, but i've been scared to let people see how bad it is

you on the other hand were writing good potry when you were 12. you did a great job on this, keep posting your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

vixengrl04
Member

since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

5 posted 2001-05-21 05:23 PM

This was really good, I liked it. When someone can write like this at 12, that's when you know they are gonna be just awesome when they are older!!

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

6 posted 2001-05-21 08:20 PM

very mature poem for a 12 year old to write...great poem...i enjoyed it and hope to see more from the earlier days...

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

7 posted 2001-06-10 11:33 PM

This is really good for a 12 yr old. You should keep writing and grow with it. Excellent job. thanks for the read

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