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Bleeding Skeletons on CNN |
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Elusive^ Junior Member
since 2001-05-13
Posts 18dancing fairy land |
jhmxdkjxckmxcmxcjmxmxcmxckxck,xck,xck,xck,xc,xkxckjdxkjxkjcxkjxkxccxkjxcxkjxjkc Something so scathing it will make your eyes swell with blood.. Seeping slowly from the tiny pores of your cornea, And wonder why your vision is a red film Flickering on the wall. Little memoirs of yourself as a kid.. Staring fixedly at another episode of a slippery soap opera. Slides of rare poses.. You, outside in the fresh air, fresh icy air Too cold, so cold.. Hugging your fur coat tighter around your gluttonous body. It's only a pose. "Can we go in now" you plead. I put away the camera with its reel of bloody film And watch as the plastic smile slips from your face And drops, forgotten to the snowy clouds. Scuttle away, go on And place yourself in front of a box. Hoping to find salvation? Entertainment? A cure for boredom? Watching bleeding skeletons on CNN, Sigh complacently for you are safe. Safe from war? Safe from pain? Safe from destitution? Contented friend, I ask you why.. Why are your eyeballs dripping with such ferocity When looking at your distorted figure in the hallway Mirror? ''I'll TAKE a QUIET life..a HANDSHAKE of CARBON monoxide with NO alarms AND no SURPRISES..'' 'LaniDarkone'..underwent a change of name. [This message has been edited by Elusive^ (edited 05-21-2001).] |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
this is the first of your work that i've read and i really like this piece. you've written some very powerful images here and expressed your feelings well. great job on this, keep sharing with us  Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Whoa. Yeah this was extremely powerful...jeez I liked this a lot. Into the library it goes... ~Carly "I'll take in anyone who's taking off their camouflage..." ~Third Eye Blind~Camouflage |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Oops. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Oops mu butt, she did that on purpose. Ok well this poem was quite powerful. I really liked the language and wording within the poem. Well done on that. The theme was very interesting...added a bit of spice to my list of reading today. Hope to read more from you!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, I agree this is very powerful and I am glad I have a free min. to come and read it. Until your next poem -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Low Man's Lyric Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 236In a dream |
This is awesome! This is the first I read from and I really enjoyed it, hope to see more from you. Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend." |
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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
wow this was extremly powerful man i really liked it keep up the incredible work and i will look for more from ya ben i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be..so deal with it |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
This was extremley powerful, I can't even explain how clear your images were and how well it struck me. Very, very, very good job on this. I hope to see more from you, and this piece is going in my library. ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
This had such sharp imagery. I really felt it with your words. Excellent work. "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
great imagery and wonderfully written...great poem...i enjoyed it a lot...thanks for sharing it...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
That was a very interesting read. You have ways with words my friend, so keep it up and keep sharing. hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Mic |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
I really like this poem, and I hope to hear more from you soon. much love!I don't have an attitude problem You have a perception problem. |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Wow *stares* (  )Bel |
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