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zarina Member
since 2001-05-19
Posts 180
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I look up at the sky I see the shining stars I wonder what I could possible do To tell you that I don't love you I don't wanna hurt you Cause I know so well how it is But I need you to understand That for me it was all a miss What I see in your eyes It's happiness and love Your smile is soft And your hands are warm It's all for me You seem so whole, So alive I just hope I won't ruin it i hope you'll forget me quick Cause I wouldn't stand to see you broken -by me- I know I soon must tell you when I wake up soaking wet Thinking 'Oh, Will he forgive me' I know I cant make a getaway yet When we are together, Im holding hands and faking smiles, but I feel like startin' cryin' Cause I know how tragic it is To love and not be loved again Now here I am, outside in the nigth, crying under the open sky. I know that I will hurt you I know I've done you wrong I know you will be crying I know how you will feel Cause I've been there myself |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done.....this is sad because you know you're going to put this person through a very hard time. It's going to be horrible...I wish you the best of luck. You expressed the situation wonderfully within the poem.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Low Man's Lyric Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 236In a dream |
This is very emotional and sad, I hope everything works out for you. I really enjoyed this poem, you displayed your feelings clearly. Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend." |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, Aww this is so sad :'( I would hate to haver to tell someone that I would prolly start crying before the person did  Its a wonderful poem. Until your next poem-- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
the emotion is beautiful and heartfelt in this piece. you wrote this very well i like it a lot. i've enjoyed reading your poetry, keep posting all your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
I can tell that this really came from your heart, I can feel it. Great work. Sounds like a tough situation, but it's much better to tell someone that you don't love them than to pretend that you do.  ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
This is such a tough subject...you definetly put it into words well. Hang in there. Keep posting! "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
sad but written so well...i liked the poem...but i hope you stay strong...and keep writing  if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
That is definitely a hard situation to be in. You seem to be genuine with you caring thoughts of him though the situation. Simply beautiful. keep em coming hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Mic |
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