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zarina
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since 2001-05-19

Posts 180

0 posted 2001-05-20 02:11 PM

-This is for the guy I loved.. and maybe still love. He's gone now..and I just miss him so..:-/
well, about the poem, its not quite finished yet..but I wanted to know what you people think.. so come on, just tell me? -

I can't stand this any longer
It isn't healthy you know
It hurts inside when I think of you,
when I know I'll never see you again.

You're still in my mind.
Reminds me of your lovely smile, your hair,
your voice, your body.. All of you.
Reminds me of the joy I felt when I saw you,
reminds me of the times that now must be past.
Reminds me that you're not here and that you
never were mine.. Reminds me of that you were oh, so fine.

You're still in my dreams.
Standing there, looking so sad.
- I don't wanna look at you, don't wanna see-
..Its breaking me even more.
You look like a giant compared to me.
Its a glaswall between us.
I knock and I call your name.
But you won't hear me.
You're just standing there smoking,
whit that sad look on you're face.
I wanna be with you, I need you so much.
Im crying, screaming of fustraiton.
But you can't see me.
Whatever I do, you can't see me.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2001-05-20 02:14 PM

Nicely done here. I could feel the pain within this one. Sounds like you're going through a rough time and I hope you mend quickly. Anyhow, you wrote this one with a lot of emotion and I enjoyed it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

zarina
Member

since 2001-05-19

Posts 180

2 posted 2001-05-20 02:18 PM

thanks for commenting

I don't know if I'll mend quickly, I rather think it would take some time to get past this. forgetting always takes time.. but, I will make it..I hope

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

3 posted 2001-05-20 04:13 PM

i certainly hope that things get better, i could really feel the emotion in this poem. please write me if you ever need someone to talk to, i'm more than happy to listen. keep posting all your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

4 posted 2001-05-20 11:25 PM

very emotional poem...written nicely...overall i liked the poem...thanks for sharing...

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

5 posted 2001-05-20 11:39 PM

talk about baring your heart for everybody to see zarina...i feel for you..i hope things become better for you as the days go on.

.. a very emotional piece..well done!

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