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Frozen Tears |
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zarina Member
since 2001-05-19
Posts 180
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I'm left alone On a soft, white cloud Haven't done nothing Won't be proud My tears are frozen My feelings are too Can't notice the difference Between happy and blue I can't cry I can't feel What's fantasy What's real You tell me 'Cause I can't see With these frozen tears in my eyes |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought the poem rocked. I really enjoyed it. The ending kind of threw me off due to the change in ryhme scheme, but I liked it anyhow. NIcely done!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i loved the ending of this, it really gave an intetresting twist to the whole piece. great job on this poem, i liked it lots  Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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DarkAngelOfTheStars Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 255 |
i liked it alot *printing* good job! Dont knock on deaths door ...... ring the bell and run......he hates that |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
ooooooh this is really cool!! "A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
awesome job...i really liked this poem...overall i enjoyed the way u have written this...thanks for sharing it...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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