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zarina
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since 2001-05-19
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0 posted 2001-05-19 03:02 PM


I saw the car.
Everything was happening so fast.
I heard your scream.

For the first time in my life,
I felt so completely helpless.
There was nothing I could do.

I wanted to freeze time.
I wish I could've rewind.
But I couldn't. And I still can't.

I saw you die.
Nothing could ever change that.
I remember that I was laughing.
I was so shocked, I was so scared.
I didn't know what to do.
So I lauged.
I will never forgive myself for that.

I saw you die.
Oh, why can't I change it?
I saw you die.

And there was nothing I could do..

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Dopey Dope
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1 posted 2001-05-19 05:19 PM


Wow........wowow.....full of emotion and power. This was a raw poem. My condolences to your friend. This was written well though. The power is astounding.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Godsend_1
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2 posted 2001-05-19 09:27 PM


wow pure emotion and very raw like mr.sexy said i loved this poem its awesome hun if ya need help or someone to talkto just ask ok love ya later hun

ben

i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be..so deal with it
to make the world the greatest place is the perfect dream in

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3 posted 2001-05-19 09:37 PM


this is so painful to read.....and I know exactly what you mean about the laughing....it's shock....I do it too...when my mind can't understand or accept something horrible, I tend to laugh....I don't mean to and it happens at the WORST times.....try not to feel too bad about that ok? It's really hard to deal with...but I understand....hugs...I'm here if you want to email me ok?    SEA
broken wing
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4 posted 2001-05-19 10:07 PM


*hugs*

"To me, fair friend, u never can be old,
For as u were when first ur eye I eyed,
Such seems ur beauty still." ~W.S.

banburycross
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viginia
5 posted 2001-05-20 03:16 PM


this poem made me tremble, the power of your writing in tis is incredible.  *HUG*  i hope things get better, write me if you want someone to talk to

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Suga_Baby
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since 2000-08-06
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Maine, USA
6 posted 2001-05-20 04:04 PM


This is so sad...  

-Suga-

"A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep."

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7 posted 2001-05-20 11:06 PM


emotional poem....great poem...u put it so well...i enjoyed the read this was sad...hope u alright now...

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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