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Wheelsgirl
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0 posted 2001-05-20 12:53 PM


Shattered Pieces

Everything feels like it’s crashing down on me.
Is there a purpose for all of this, is this done so that I can’t see?
I don’t know if I can clean up the mess myself.
Where am I supposed to turn for help?

Shattered pieces are like a puzzle that is hard to put back together
the same way before it broke.
Does that mean I’ll never understand how to put it together again?
Or is just an old fashioned bad joke?

Some people say that life is too easy or some say too hard.
Does that mean that people think life is just a game of cards?
If so what do you do, how do you play?
Although maybe to play there is a large price to pay?

Shattered pieces are like a puzzle that is hard to put back together
the same way before it broke.
Does that mean I’ll never understand how to put it together again?
Or is just an old fashioned bad joke?

© Copyright 2001 Kelly Gambon - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-05-20 01:23 PM


Well done .....I liked this one a lot. I hope all goes well with you in the future.
Hope all is alright now too  


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

[This message has been edited by Dopey_Dope (edited 05-20-2001).]

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2 posted 2001-05-20 02:27 PM


You raise a lot of hard questions here... it is hard to put the pieces back together, but you will. The repitition in this piece worked really well. Great work... best of luck!

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

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3 posted 2001-05-20 04:23 PM


this is the first piece i've read by you so far and i really like it.  putting the pieces back is never easy, it's like repacking your suitcase after a trip and wonderinghow you got everthing together in the first place    great writing, i hope things get better.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

mistic
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4 posted 2001-05-20 09:11 PM


I really like this one. It's something I can relate to.  Great job. Hope things get better.
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5 posted 2001-05-21 02:09 AM


great job on writing this as i enjoyed the read and hope things are better

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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6 posted 2001-05-25 10:30 PM


I really like how you expressed this feeling..i've been there b4 so dont worry hun your not alone...good job
Ski*Chick
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7 posted 2001-05-25 11:25 PM


~*~Kelly your life will get better, don't worry. You know who to call if your sad.  

~*~Minna~*~  

It's hard seeing someone loving your ex, when it's your ex friend who's loving him.

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8 posted 2001-05-29 06:31 PM


You and Minna are an inspiration to me.  You've always shown so much inner strength.  Maybe now, it's my turn to return the favor.  Look at the bright things in life and youll see that likfe is full of smiles.  ~*hugs*~

I'm so sorry for doubting you Kit ... please forgive me!!!!

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with you
9 posted 2001-05-29 06:58 PM


the puzzle keeps remaking itself.....the pieces fit one way...then BOOM! then, they fit another way....pieces get added and some get taken away....either way, you learn and the puzzle grows.....
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