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thedarkangel
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since 2001-05-12

Posts 74
~*~the cutest~*~

0 posted 2001-05-18 02:17 PM

~*~this is for my daniel~*~

There's a definition of perfect
how things are meant to be
but my definition of perfect
is you being here with me.

Many people pass us by
over these long years
and confide in us their
hopes, dreams, passions and fears

Some are kept and some dismmised
You told me yours, I told you mine
our mutual love
clenched tightly in our fists

Every minute I knew you
I think I loved you more
then one day you told me so
and my heart began to soar

Now I love everything about you
even your duffed up hair
to be with you is perfect
and about nothing else do i care.

Each Moment in time is a pinprick in eternity-Marcus Aurilius
Seize the day;think how many ladies passed up dessert on the Titanic!

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-05-18 02:53 PM

this is so wonderful

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

2 posted 2001-05-18 05:46 PM

this is a nice tribute and a lovely description, i liked this a lot. i like reading your work, keep sharing your talent with all of us.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

3 posted 2001-05-19 01:20 PM

Nice work!  I like everything about this except for the last line... the way the sentence was worded really didn't do much for me, it kinda seemed a bit laboured.
Aside from that I like how you played around with the scheme of rhyme.
Very nice work.

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-05-19 04:57 PM

Good job!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

5 posted 2001-05-19 08:10 PM

Refreshing

I really liked it...though I feel like I'm going to cry now..but can't wait to read more..

Kristen

"Let me be the one you call, if you jump I'll break your fall, lift you up and fly away with you into the night"

~Crash and Burn~

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

6 posted 2001-05-21 02:08 AM

beautiful images of love...wonderful job on writing this...a very nice tribute...hope u gave this to him...and thanks for sharing...

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

7 posted 2001-05-25 10:31 PM

Wonderful job...keep em coming

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

8 posted 2001-05-29 09:01 PM

this is so wonderfully sweet

keep it up and keep sharing

I'm so sorry for doubting you Kit ... please forgive me!!!!

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