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Kosetsu
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since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

0 posted 2001-05-18 10:48 PM

Did it mean a single thing?
Was it just a joke?
You make me oh so sick,
I think I’m gonna choke!

All the things I shared with you,
All the things I let you know,
Go ahead, just kill me now,
End it all with one more blow!

What about “I love you”?
Was that another lie?
Looks that way, doesn’t it?
I wish that I could die!

You just want to be friends,
But you won’t say a word,
All the things you used to say,
I wish I’d never heard!

So just guess what I’m gonna do,
I’m just gonna forget about you,
Block you out as best I can,
Before my mind I lose to you!

"No one holds command over me.
No man.
No god.
No prince."

pharon
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since 1999-11-13

Posts 251
alabama

1 posted 2001-05-18 11:16 PM

while pain of losing someone we love/trust/and all that jazz really hurts us, in the long run the anger makes us stronger...so while you may be (or have been) in pain..it will get better..and the experience of loves made and lost will form who you are. good poem

Godsend_1
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since 2001-04-19

Posts 247
great state of illinois

2 posted 2001-05-19 02:17 AM

very cool adam i really have to say that i love you work keep it up man you rock the whole situation sux btw later

ben

i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be..so deal with it
to make the world the greatest place is the perfect dream in

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

3 posted 2001-05-19 11:08 AM

i like this piece, you expressed the anger in this piece perfectly. the exclaimations at the end of every stanza really helped you get that feeling across to the reader, excellent job

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-05-19 04:08 PM

Lots of power within this poem. I feel the anger within it too. Yea kill off the thoughts before the thoughts kill you.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Spice
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since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

5 posted 2001-05-20 12:21 PM

Great poem! I loved this one. You described the situation perfectly. I also wonder the same exact questions.

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

6 posted 2001-05-21 01:14 AM

powerful...i liked the emotions in this poem...great job...hope to see more...

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

7 posted 2001-05-26 10:58 AM

The eomtions were powerful and you described your feelings great...good job hun keep em comin

HeAvEnS AnGeL
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since 2001-05-17

Posts 168
The Hot Girl From Canada

8 posted 2001-05-27 04:12 PM

Wow! I know just how you feel, I'm trying to forget about a guy who just did the very same thing to me. This poem is so going in my library for insperation

hope thins werk out for yah in the end

Don't judge a person untill you have walked a mile in their shoes, this way your a mile away from them, and you have their shoes.

stace_co2003
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since 2001-03-30

Posts 497
In a dream world

9 posted 2001-05-27 04:17 PM

you portray emotion very well in this...it's very powerful, and I know exactly where you are coming from.
hope to hear more from you
*s*
Stace
P.S. keep your chin up!! and always keep smiling...

Although teenagers claim independence and idealism, we have a common need for guidance, love, a shoulder to occasionally cry on, and at times a close

Deranger
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since 2000-05-10

Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there

10 posted 2001-05-27 05:48 PM

Wow...how creepy...this is exactly what i went through...to the word. Wow...how distrubing. I thought such happening were confined to my sad life.

Well, i really can relate...good job...

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anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

11 posted 2001-05-28 11:24 AM

A word springs to mind. It's OUCH! I hope you come out of it a stronger man.

Good luck.

~AF~

Know what you want. Become your real self.
~ David Harold Fink ~

Kosetsu
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since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

12 posted 2001-05-28 05:30 PM

Thanks for the comments folks. And yeah, it's made me stronger. A weekend away from home helped me put it all behind me. Anyway, gotta go unpack.

-Kosetsu

"Eat, drink, and be merry, for tomorrow we die." - Shakespeare

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