Teen Poetry #4 |
Injured by words |
chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
I never knew How harsh words Could be. Never knew What sword hid Behind them. I never knew You could feel This way. I guess I know you not. The wounds you make To my mortality Hurt not My physical being. The wounds you make Within my soul Are embeded And pain sears My heart. Your bladed tongue Lashes out at me. You turn away As the words create Their own silence. I am blind. You are deaf. There is nothing left To say. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Great job on this one...I think this is the 1st I have read of yours and I liked it very much...Not many people realize they are hurting someones feelings until they are done doing it...We have all done it...Thats just the way we were created to judge the rest...Keep up the good work!!! "If you should die before me, ask if you could bring a friend." |
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HeAvEnS AnGeL Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 168The Hot Girl From Canada |
Ooh i know this one all to well I'm sure every child heard this one... "if you dont have anything nice to say, dont say anything at all." Don't you wish people actually listend to their parents? i know i do. Words are sharper then any blade of a sword, and they cut deeper as well. always remember words always come back to haunt you! |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Ooh great work! I really like the last ending thoughts, I am blind, you are deaf. Really, really neat. You did a fine job on this poem. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
geat poem...i really liked how you wrote this...i enjoyed this alot "I am blind. You are deaf. There is nothing left To say" powerful last lines....thanks for sharing and keep writing... ...? if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
this is really powerful writing, the images in this piece are incredible and i really like the way you ended this. great job, keep writing. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Yay!!! I looooooved this. This is the first poem I've ever read by you, and it's terrific. I agree with the others, the ending thoughts are great. Keep em coming!!! Jenn "If it's wrong to love you, then my heart just won't let me be right, cause I'm drowned in you, and I won't pull through without you by my side." Mari |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
You rocked this one all the way to Idaho! Ok no, but I did like this one a lot. Ps- DO you play guitar?....tell me in one of my poems or in teen chat cuz i usually don't check a poem twice cuz i have so much replying to do I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You have so many different emotions that you convey in one poem. A true showing of talent. I loved the read, keep it up and keep sharing. hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Allan, Val, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Michele, |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I loved the last lines in your poem..they were amazing. I really enjoyed this...made me think a lil! hehe Thanks for sharing and keep em comin! |
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HVNsnt82086 Junior Member
since 2001-06-05
Posts 30United States |
I think this is one of the best poems that I've ever read. It's written perfectly and sends a great message. I'm glad I found it because it appies to my life as of late. One of my friends decided to "get everything off her chest" as she put it, and it hurt me like nothing else could. Thanks for the great poem that I can send to her, to let her know how much she hurt me. Keep up the great work!! "So when you feel like hope is gone, look inside you and be strong, and you'll finally see the truth...that a hero lies in you." *~Mariah Carey- Hero~ |
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