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No one, but you. |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
If I could feel Your arms around me I would burn From the love You gave me. If your love Was as vast As the open prairie I would get lost Only to find you Beside me. If there were as many tears As there are in the sea You would save me From drowning And set my spirit Free. And if my heart Was taken from me You'd be the one To hold it Gently. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This is great! The rhyme was perfectly done, this is probably my favourite of your poems that I have read so far. Very very nice job, brilliantly creative! ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
chasing i like this alot! its my first to have read by u so im gonna lookies for some mores nows. i loved the flow of this. and i liked wut u said in the poem itself alots. great job! o and i love ur sn  tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
well done on the poem...this was averu good poem...i liked the images in this one...keep writing...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
You wrote this well. I liked it a lot!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Who's you insipration for this? This is really good, I'm pretty impressed. You're talented, so keep writing and grow into it  Beautiful read "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
aww this was really wonderful flowed together nicely..cant wait to read another post!*dq **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Very nicely written. I loved it. |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
I LOVED THIS!! It was written so beautifully and I think you did an awesome job!! ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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