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Blue Lagoon |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA 
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Under the sun, I swoon on the sand of the Blue Lagoon. I surrender to the caresses of the soothing breeze, to the rustling trees and the gleaming water and wonder whether this may be heaven or just a dream... |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Wow, I really like the dreamy effect of this. Great job! Keep it up! |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This was nice, Master. However I've enjoyed reading your others more... your latest styles have been similar to this one, I've noticed. The others that I enjoyed in this style were a bit longer, it made the improved flow more appreciatable. (that's a word, I just invented it  )Still some nice work. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this is nice  |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Very dreamy Good job i enjoyed it |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was wonderful. I loved it and how it was written. The ending is superb!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
There you go again Master ~*magnific*~ keep em coming I'm so sorry for doubting you Kit ... please forgive me!!!! |
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