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XFalloutX Junior Member
since 2001-05-13
Posts 31NC |
This kinda goes with the "Ask her?" poem The fear just keeps building up The wall grows higher I can’t find the strength to break down the wall My heart stops at just the thought of asking You say asking never hurt anything You say the worse thing she could say is NO But that’s what I’m afraid of To hear that one word from her The pain of that one word Could bring me to my knees She is my life my dream To lose that dream There would be no reason to look forward to tomorrow "should I smile because we are friends or cry because thats all will ever be?" |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
Interesting. You've definetly addressed the emotion at hand. Keep posting. "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
HA! Me first one patrick.  BEAT 'EM ALL!!! hehe. I wish i had a super soaker...Anyway...must you write with such passion? You make me cry, man! Stop it! lol. Anyway...ciao! |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Dangit! Beat me to it...do you know how embarrassing this is? DON'T LAUGH PAT! lol. Ok, laugh...:P Keep writing your head off.  |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Do you two know one another, by any chance?  |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
the emotions in this one was quite nice...even tho it was sad ones...but hey i liked how you put it together...keep writing...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well i liked this one......and im guessing chaising knows you  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This is a good read. You did good on this piece. Thanks for sharing and keep it up "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
geez Patrick, you sure know how to make me depressed!! but ya know what? I'll ask her if she likes you, but you have to do the rest from there, k? I wish I could decide she likes you for her, but I can't...I'd love to though...anything for you to be happy. love ya!! *s* Stace p.s. keep your chin up! |
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