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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl 
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I was scared, I was all alone, Then there they were, They showed me joy. I was bored with life, and finding it hard to get up in the morning. Wishing for something good to happen, They showed me life is thrilling. I needed to cry, I was just so sad, Pleading for a way out... It was all because of them. They showed me I needed to get out. They showed me I deserved better. They showed me my heart... still beating in their hands. Not a current sitch. It just goes to show that the people we trust to bring happiness to our lives, can really end up hurting us.  Thanks for reading! |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
ouch, you really know how to break a man's heart don't ya? Thats a sad poem, a great poem but a sad poem. >¶Øʆ< |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Jenn this is a remarkable story and it is very true with many people which is sad to say. I am glaid you shared this with us i am sure some people are to blind to see what is truly happening. Share with us always ~Amanda~ |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Poet- Some may say so... but I really don't think so. I just save myself some pain. But this isn't really about any man... thanks for reading! Angel- Thanks, I have been blind in things like this before.... as we always say.. "never again!!" Thanks for replying. xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
VERY VERY WELL DONE!!!! Keep up the great work! -Allan |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
The poem was average, but the last line left an impacting sensation within me. Good job on it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Well I really liked the whole poem but the ending did not really capture me, but maybe that's just cause I wanted to disagree with Dopey  Yup, that's it. I actually think you did a really good job on this "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Great poem Jenn. So true, and well said. Jay 'Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN' ~Hatebreed~ [This message has been edited by IsGona (edited 05-15-2001).] |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
good write and an enjoyable read. keep em coming "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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