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Kosetsu
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since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

0 posted 2001-05-17 08:35 PM

Forbidden emotions,
That I need to feel,
Forbidden feelings,
Cold as ice, hard as steel.

Forbidden images,
That we need to see,
Forbidden ideas,
That will set us free.

Forbidden memories,
That I wish I could recall,
Forbidden meetings,
That came after love’s dark fall.

Forbidden weaknesses,
That I don’t need,
Forbidden powers,
Warnings I don’t heed.

Forbidden dreams,
Forbidden numbered ten,
Forbidden things,
All these are verboten.

"No one holds command over me.
No man.
No god.
No prince."

obscurity of cloud
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since 2001-05-11

Posts 294
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1 posted 2001-05-17 09:18 PM

This has a really neat theme, and i like the German title. Keep it up!

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

2 posted 2001-05-18 12:21 PM

Ah yes, German. Wollt ihr das Bett in Flammen sehen?
Ok I'm done.

I like how you used the number ten to mark your forbidden items. Really neat theme.

Great job.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-05-18 02:51 AM

great job on this...i liked the meaning a lot that was behind this poem...thanks for the read...and keep writing...

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

4 posted 2001-05-18 07:25 AM

*blinks* err...say what? Sorry, I know like maybe three German words..I want to learn more, just nobody to teach me.

-Kosetsu

"No one holds command over me.
No man.
No god.
No prince."

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

5 posted 2001-05-18 01:28 PM

shlobberflobbin - it's my own personal language

i liked this piece, it was an interesting read and you did a good job on it. keep posting all your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-05-19 02:40 PM

What yer all psycho?huh?

Well I liked the poem, but I didn't find it to be as powerful as some of your past poems. You still did well on this one.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

7 posted 2001-05-22 07:57 AM

I liked the idea of having all of these things be forbidding..i liked it a lot keep it up

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

8 posted 2001-05-22 08:22 AM

Great poem Kosetsu, very well done.

Zu

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