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chasing rain
Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

0 posted 2001-05-17 12:23 PM

I'm on a roll!

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A barrier
Between us
Can't reach you
It's hopeless
But somehow,
Someday
I'll get through
To you...

All I want to say
All I want to do
All I want for you
Is to know that
I'll be there
For you.

In your eyes
I see the misery.
In your heart
I feel your pain
Inside of me.
I want
To be
There
For you.
Will you let me through?
All I want to say
All I want to do
All I want for you
Is to know that
I'll be there
For you.

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-05-17 01:50 AM

hey this poem was great...but its good that you on a roll and everything but the guildlines are only three poetrya day and i think you have passed that ..lol

...yea..and its good that you are sharing alot but replying also would be good...anwyays...i hope to see more...i'm liking your poems so far...lol...

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

2 posted 2001-05-17 02:56 AM

Aw very sweet. I hope that you are there for this person. Everyone needs someone to be there for them. Your poem expressed these feelings well.

~AF~

Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed.
~ Unknown ~

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

3 posted 2001-05-18 09:02 AM

the first stanza of this was my favorite part of this poem, it flowed really well. the short lines you used really helped the flow of this piece. gret job, and keep posting your work

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

4 posted 2001-05-19 12:05 PM

What a great poem!! You sound extremely determined to help this person your speaking of in the poem and i believe that one day you will get through to them..although it might take a lot. Great job i really liked this one

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-05-19 04:20 PM

This poem was utterly sweet. Very well written and I enjoyed it a lot!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

6 posted 2001-05-27 04:03 PM

Such sweet words that breeze thru one's lips. Beautiful write chasing rain. keep it up

I'm so sorry for doubting you Kit ... please forgive me!!!!

stace_co2003
Member

since 2001-03-30

Posts 497
In a dream world

7 posted 2001-05-27 04:05 PM

*two thumbs up*

you are on a roll, and you should keep it up!! you have done a great job on this one and the others I have read.
*s*
Stace

Although teenagers claim independence and idealism, we have a common need for guidance, love, a shoulder to occasionally cry on, and at times a close

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