(Leaf Series) 4-Arthur's Love (Italian Sonnet)

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LoveBug

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0 posted 2001-05-16 08:54 PM

This is my first sonnet. This isn't the sonnet most of you are used to reading (the English one, Shakespearean). This is the older one, the Italian style (AKA Petrarchean). I hope you all enjoy it!

I find that love oft dictates light and doom
It even dictates kingdoms rise and fall
King Arthur’s love was known to one and all
And Guinevere, she made our king’s love bloom
Then Lancelot’s betrayal made trouble loom
And Arthur heard Morgana’s evil call
The golden age of England had to stall
And still it seems that she’s within her tomb

Today we wonder if our king was real
If love did dictate England’s slow decline
But if it did, ‘tis no surprise to me
For love still dictates all the things we feel
Still I believe our king would say this line:
‘Tis worth the risk, so let love come to thee!

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

[This message has been edited by LoveBug (edited 05-16-2001).]

lonely*soul
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1 posted 2001-05-16 09:22 PM

i like this,,,greatr job for your first sonnet. i wanna see some more of these by you
*KiMMiE*

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2 posted 2001-05-16 10:24 PM

This was so creative! I really like what you did with the petrearchan form, excellent work!

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anonymous albert ?

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3 posted 2001-05-17 01:29 AM

great words...it protrayed so much beautiful...i really liked it and your first try at this sonnet was a success...hope to see more erica...and thanks for sharing it...

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anonymousfemale
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4 posted 2001-05-17 02:30 AM

I totally love this, Erica!! In the library for sure. The power of the words gave me goosebumps. Seriously it did! It is great to see you experimenting with such old styles. I would love to see you write more of these as you write them so well. The second part really made me float. Well, not float as such but give you that feeling where you think you're floating.

It's an amazing piece that raised many questions over here.

Thanks for such a wonderful read, Erica.

~AF~

Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed.
~ Unknown ~

banburycross
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viginia

5 posted 2001-05-18 08:46 AM

this is incredible writing, i am really liking all the pieces i have read in this series. i like that your using lots of different formats throughout too. great job on this piece, keep posting your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

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6 posted 2001-05-19 01:46 PM

Erica you did so wonderfully on this one.And you said you sucked at Sonnets! HA!
HA!
And a triple HA!!!!!!!!!!!
This was great!

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I admire it daily

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7 posted 2001-05-31 07:25 PM

You've been utterly impressing me lately
~*picks jaw off the floor*~
Magnificent writing Erica
~*standing Ovation*~

I'm so sorry for doubting you Kit ... please forgive me!!!!

Allan Riverwood

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8 posted 2001-06-01 12:10 PM

Yes, I agree... this is wonderful writing! Keep an eye on that meter though, girl.

Be sure to count the stresses out to yourself out loud before you post things. This one seemed alright but there were some small parts that the meter was stretched a bit in.
No worries though, the writing here is marvelous, as I said.
You did a fine job, Erica.

~Allan

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