Teen Poetry #4 |
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Alone |
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XFalloutX Junior Member
since 2001-05-13
Posts 31NC |
Why must I be alone I long for the touch of someone I grow weaker every day I fear I’m going to fall I need someone to catch me but there is no one there (have you notice that my poems are short? I guess there just short sweet and to the point??????) "should I smile because we are friends or cry because thats all will ever be?" |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
your poems are short, but that certainly isn't a bad thing. it just meansd that it is more of a challenge to create something powerful and deep in a few words. with this particular one it seemed to be lacking a little of that punch. still a good poem and a nice thought but i really think you could expand on this a little and make it even better. anyway, great job on this ![]() Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
short poem are sometimes better if you know how to write them and you do...so its koo...and this poem hit home for me!...i liked every word in this poem...i enjoyed the read and keep writing...goooooo short poems!!!...keep writing hehe... ![]() if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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~*brittt*~ Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 76East Haddam, CT |
'short, sweet and to the point'. that's the kind I like. This one was kinda sad, but very well written. You DID get that point across. Good job, I like... ![]() ~britt~ |
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xShUgArHiGhx![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I too happen to like 'short and sweet and to the point'...this was such a sad and lonely poem...but very good ![]() |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
My most fav poems are short and sweet....well sometimes they are pure evil but that goes in accordance to the theme of the poem. Anyhow, well done on this one. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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