Teen Poetry #4 |
The Future |
Ender Member
since 1999-12-08
Posts 200Yuma, AZ USA |
Marriage, as a thought Sure is a lot Think, as I do Do we have a clue? The future, it shall be Let us wait, let us see Predict, we have done Now, time for the fun Together, time is spent We will know if this is meant Us, we shall be Together, from sea to sea Wonderful day, when it appears Our love will be with many tears Together, I want to be With you, my bride to be Hopes, high as they are Just think how far My love, endless for you I hope you love me too Now wait, we must For our life ahead, full of lust The future, unknown Only to be wished and shown There, we are for each other Like a baby bird and its mother There, we shall stay Until that wonderful, beautiful day ****Poem #2 of a Series of 6**** If I could be anything in the world, I would want to be your tear. I would be born in your eyes, live on your cheek, and die on your lips. -Ender |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
i liked the first piece a little better than this one, i thought the last rhyme in this piece was a little weak. you did a good job with this anyway, keep posting all your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
This was a great piece although I was kinda puzzled in the first two lines as how you pronounce "thought" and "lot"... good work though... Marshal Zu |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
good job...the series was quite nice..i liekd them both...thanks for the read... ...? if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked the first one better but this one was fine nonetheless I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You did a good job on this one. it was an enjoyable read. keep it up hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Val, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Michel |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
The future scares me ::sniffles:: Good poem..u did a nice job on it |
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