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Ender
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since 1999-12-08

Posts 200
Yuma, AZ USA

0 posted 2001-05-16 10:40 AM

Marriage, as a thought
Sure is a lot
Think, as I do
Do we have a clue?

The future, it shall be
Let us wait, let us see
Predict, we have done
Now, time for the fun

Together, time is spent
We will know if this is meant
Us, we shall be
Together, from sea to sea

Wonderful day, when it appears
Our love will be with many tears
Together, I want to be
With you, my bride to be

Hopes, high as they are
Just think how far
My love, endless for you
I hope you love me too

Now wait, we must
For our life ahead, full of lust
The future, unknown
Only to be wished and shown

There, we are for each other
Like a baby bird and its mother
There, we shall stay
Until that wonderful, beautiful day

****Poem #2 of a Series of 6****

If I could be anything in the world, I would want to be your tear. I would be born in your eyes, live on your cheek, and die on your lips. -Ender

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

1 posted 2001-05-16 10:46 AM

i liked the first piece a little better than this one, i thought the last rhyme in this piece was a little weak. you did a good job with this anyway, keep posting all your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

2 posted 2001-05-16 10:52 AM

This was a great piece although I was kinda puzzled in the first two lines as how you pronounce "thought" and "lot"... good work though...

Marshal Zu

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-05-17 02:36 AM

good job...the series was quite nice..i liekd them both...thanks for the read...

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Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-05-18 04:11 PM

I liked the first one better but this one was fine nonetheless

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

5 posted 2001-06-06 07:22 PM

You did a good job on this one. it was an enjoyable read. keep it up

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xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

6 posted 2001-06-10 11:39 AM

The future scares me ::sniffles:: Good poem..u did a nice job on it

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