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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia 
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I(d) Where am I? Who am I! What have I seen. Where have I been: If you've seen(what I've seen) If you've been(where I've been) Would you be me Would I be you Together; an immortal coil To spring into mutual Identification(I am Not he nor she is not me) You is not found And are not me We are not me I am not me Nor are you Nothing To Me -------------------------- Pretty out there huh? For some reason, I'm proud of this piece. Something in it clicks with me. "The heart can think of no devotion |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
yea this was definately out there but i enjoyed it! It made me think a lil which dont happen to often w/me lol Gooooooooooooood one here |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i liked this a lot maybe cause this is a poem that is very simlar to a poem i wrote in meaning...anyways..i dont think its out there but in a way its nice to see other poets trying differentw ays of writing...keep writing...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
the last two lines of this are my favorite part of this piece, i liked that a lot. the fromat was cool and made for an interesting read. great job, keep posting your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Oooh I liked this a lot, somehow it just really hit me... well done  Mr mr Zu " The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots" -Thomas jefferson |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was weird....but I could see how you liked this one....I appreciate this poem myself. Great job on it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
very interesting read.....appreciate the sahre "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Ever see the movie " So I married an Axe murderer" w/ Michael Myers? ANYWAY- In the movie he recites poetry to music in this weird way. ( There is a point to this story- keep reading.) So when I was reading your poem...Haha...I for some reason read it like he reads it...I liked it alot... Sounded cool like that. Great poem. |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
MAJOR WICKED!!! Ok, not in an evil way But I thought it was absobalootly cool. Very neat. hehe...i never use that word. Eh, there's a first time for everything... |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
this rocked! I liked the brokenness of it..if thats a word lol awesome job! *dq **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
WHOA! LOVED the style. One of my faves by you, surely. Stellar poem, simply stellar. ~Carly "I'll take in anyone who's taking off their camouflage..." ~Third Eye Blind~Camouflage |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I love the title! I thought that was amazingly well thought out. I am pretty sure you are referring to the Id according to psychoanalitic theory, correct? This really, really, really impressed me. You obviously put a lot of thought into this, I truly enjoyed reading it. The format was crazy cool. Excellent work.  ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
That's incredible. Psychology is a sort of hobby of mine. Wow "The heart can think of no devotion |
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