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Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

0 posted 2001-05-21 08:07 PM

Dark blue heaven
nestled deep in our souls
Fearing the emptiness
of escaping ourselves
and our life long companion
Exposed to new heights,
but we always look down
Watching one of us
become eaten and digested
by the familiar unknown
Explosions in your eyes
reflecting my own
sense of unsettled discomfort
We all died,
therefore, we know how to live
because we know the difference
Unopened packages
waiting at the door,
Just one of the many
inside the labyrinth of our souls

"...if you want love you must be love.."
Billy Corgan, Smashing Pumpkins

Terryloveiris_85
Member

since 2001-04-23

Posts 61
The middle of nowhere

1 posted 2001-05-21 08:31 PM

Another great work of the Dark one! nice work
going in my library
~IRIS

i'd give eternity to be by your side-goo goo dolls/City of Angels soundtrack

goodness is found in the heart, not the money.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2001-05-21 09:28 PM

this is amazing

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-05-21 09:32 PM

wow...powerful...i really liked this poem...awesome job and hope to see more...

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-21-2001).]

mistic
Member

since 2001-05-06

Posts 233
Idaho, U.S.A.

4 posted 2001-05-21 10:32 PM

I really like the images you created here

Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

5 posted 2001-05-22 06:57 AM

Hmmm...very interesting. Some intriguing thoughts in here, g'job...
~Carly

"I'll take in anyone who's taking off their camouflage..." ~Third Eye Blind~Camouflage

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

6 posted 2001-05-22 01:25 PM

as always the dark images that you create with your words are incredible, you did an awsome job on this piece. keep posting all your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

7 posted 2001-05-22 08:20 PM

Well done! I really thought the ending was great, but I felt this piece was lacking something in your work that it usually has. Your work usually has some kind of punch. Anyhow, this was still great and i look forward to reading more from you in the future.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Dark Enchantress
Senior Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

8 posted 2001-05-22 09:24 PM

You know after I posted it (this was another free flow right of the top of my head sorta poems) I felt as though it was lacking something, but I thought that maybe the metaphors and deep meanings would still make it decent. *shrugs* I'm gettin' rusty...what can I say?

Thanks for your replies everyone, and Javier...thanks for your honesty.

"...if you want love you must be love.."
Billy Corgan, Smashing Pumpkins

obscurity of cloud
Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 294
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9 posted 2001-05-22 09:45 PM

"the labrynth of our souls"...i love that line. Great work.

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

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