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anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

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0 posted 2001-05-15 10:30 PM

overflowing emotions
as tears willing to be free
as they were trapped within
but i try so hard
despertly
to hold in my unbearable tears
but never is it ever
kept to silence
as i realize...
never does my heart lie to me
and when the tears finally breakdown
and are all cried out
they are full of sadness
and painfulness
to see that i'm on my own to survive
which i look into the future
i see so many more mountains
that is needed to climb
when with all my past i came so far
but its realized...
that i still have a long hard way to go
where every thought comes to me
as it cuts through my heart
to tears again
as i come to seek answers
but instead more problems lies ahead
so i'm stranded
in this life
of everlasting pain
where the pain is muliplied
as the sadness
becomes equaled to the pain
but these struggles
after struggles
i'll have to live my life
as i'm realizing...
that there is
so much more
pain to be seen
with so much more
suffer to be lived

jan.23...

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[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-15-2001).]

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1 posted 2001-05-15 11:22 PM

This has so much depth of emotion...your feelings are so well expressed. Very well done.

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

LoneWolf
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2 posted 2001-05-15 11:35 PM

Wow this was a great poem, with much emotion. loved this, i related to every word you wrote. great job.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.

I've learned that even when you

anonymousfemale
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3 posted 2001-05-16 02:24 AM

Albertia, amazing. You have just written a piece that so many people can identify with. There is just so much feeling and truth in your words.
This one I really, really liked from you.

Thanks for the read.

~AF~

Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed.
~ Unknown ~

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

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viginia

4 posted 2001-05-16 09:47 AM

you make the feeling and emotions in this so pure with your words, you did a truly beautiful job with this. i like this piece, don't ever stop sharing your writing with us.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Marshalzu

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Lurking

5 posted 2001-05-16 09:52 AM

Great piece Albert very good read, I found it very easy to identify with

Marshal Zu

keoni
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6 posted 2001-05-16 10:14 AM

Great poem. I really related to it. It expresses so many thing in life. Reall really good job.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

Dopey Dope

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7 posted 2001-05-17 07:43 PM

Well done Albert! The ending was simply amazing. I loved this!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Allan Riverwood

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8 posted 2001-05-17 11:57 PM

Simply an awesome ending.
The title is perfect, it's such an important aspect of the poem. I really can't praise you enough on the title.

How you put it in italics... made it seem like a distant memory. I suppose that was because you wrote this at seventeen.
Gee, can't wait 'til my next birthday.

~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

Erin
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9 posted 2001-05-18 12:04 PM

Albert~
You have opened up yourself a great deal. Showed a side that I have never seen in poems by you. Great work...I hope to read more of it soon...

"If you should die before me, ask if you could bring a friend."

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