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.....?\"life at 17....."
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.....?\"life at 17....." |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
overflowing emotions as tears willing to be free as they were trapped within but i try so hard despertly to hold in my unbearable tears but never is it ever kept to silence as i realize... never does my heart lie to me and when the tears finally breakdown and are all cried out they are full of sadness and painfulness to see that i'm on my own to survive which i look into the future i see so many more mountains that is needed to climb when with all my past i came so far but its realized... that i still have a long hard way to go where every thought comes to me as it cuts through my heart to tears again as i come to seek answers but instead more problems lies ahead so i'm stranded in this life of everlasting pain where the pain is muliplied as the sadness becomes equaled to the pain but these struggles after struggles i'll have to live my life as i'm realizing... that there is so much more pain to be seen with so much more suffer to be lived jan.23...  ...?[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-15-2001).] |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
This has so much depth of emotion...your feelings are so well expressed. Very well done. "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
Wow this was a great poem, with much emotion. loved this, i related to every word you wrote. great job. It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Albertia, amazing. You have just written a piece that so many people can identify with. There is just so much feeling and truth in your words. This one I really, really liked from you. Thanks for the read.  ~AF~ Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
you make the feeling and emotions in this so pure with your words, you did a truly beautiful job with this. i like this piece, don't ever stop sharing your writing with us. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great piece Albert very good read, I found it very easy to identify with Marshal Zu |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Great poem. I really related to it. It expresses so many thing in life. Reall really good job. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done Albert! The ending was simply amazing. I loved this!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Simply an awesome ending. The title is perfect, it's such an important aspect of the poem. I really can't praise you enough on the title. How you put it in italics... made it seem like a distant memory. I suppose that was because you wrote this at seventeen. Gee, can't wait 'til my next birthday.  ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Albert~ You have opened up yourself a great deal. Showed a side that I have never seen in poems by you. Great work...I hope to read more of it soon... "If you should die before me, ask if you could bring a friend." |
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