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soulfulpoet Junior Member
since 2000-04-14
Posts 42ontario, canada |
all of my poems right now are depressing, but hopefully ill come to a point in my life where i can right happy poems... Daydream These insomniac nightmares, slowly kill me. My mind is rotting, cracking in two. This heavenly body is so dirty, it's pure. I'm slowly going insane. My mind is disturbed. I can't remember what it feels like to be happy. I'm running, never stopping. I'm running from myself. Why? Why doesn't anyone save me? Why can't anyone hear my silent screams? Raw intensity drowns my mind, I'm choking on the entity of numbness. I feel the pain, but can't stop it. I don't think I want to. This is all I know. I try to run away, but you can't run from yourself. I can never escape. "tonight im tangled in my blanket of clouds, dreaming aloud" (foo fighters) |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
I really like this one alot. You did a great job, but it is really sad. I wish the best for you, and I hope that soon your time of depressing poems will pass. Good job though!  ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i enjoyed this a lot and yay!!...its a depressing poem..hehe but yea...i love depressing poems cause i can relate to what they have to say...great job and...keep writing...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
oops...  [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 05-15-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
VERY VERY well done! I fully enjoyed this depressing, sad poem. I used to write just like this and feel just like this. I know how it is to want to escape yourself, but obiously can't. Well done on this one and get well soon!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Nice....that was really good. You have a lot of talent in you. keep it up and keep sharing. I'll be waiting for the next read  "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
True, running away from yourself never works. I used to think that if I wasnt me, I wouldnt have all these problems. I was probably right, but the point is, I havent figured out how to have a "undo-able" out of body experience, so I guess were all stuck.  Just go w/ the flow and keep smiling.*~*Amanda*~* |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow...even though this is sad....it's so well done..... |
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