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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
her name was Peace innocent like a child nothing more then one she was swept away stolen in the night innocese defiled...lost more pain then she imagined washing over her in waves she escapes into a different world already its to late to resist shes to weak to fight she was dead before he started she was already gone her mind in a differnt world she didnt notice when he killed her he left her there alone after he was finished with her beaten and raped...dead he cleaned up his mess left no evidence behind he was never found for justice she was buried in a peaceful spot her soul already gone but her spirit remained to haunt other half of my heart i held her close to me as i blame a faceless ghost years later i let her go i finally let her spirit rest and went on with my life the flowers are floating to honour your memory to give your restless soul...Peace “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Another great piece by you Tiff  I really enjoyed the read keep on posting.Mr mr Zu " The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots" -Thomas jefferson |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
There wasn't really a particular rhyme scheme that I could find for this one, but I loved it!! I read it twice, and both times I got the chills at the end. Very, very, very well done, this is going into my library for sure! Great work! ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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Godsend_1 Member
since 2001-04-19
Posts 247great state of illinois |
wow baby this was an awesome poem hun i love you so much i hope ya feel better ben i am what i am and that is all that i am and all that i shall ever be......so deal with it |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
powerful writing in this piece, you wrote this beautifully. the peace in italics was a nice way to tie up the poem at the end, the last stanza was wonderful. good job on this, keep posting your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
wow!...this was a powerful piece...i really enjoyed it...this was written very nicely..well done tiff..and keep writing...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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thedarkangel Member
since 2001-05-12
Posts 74~*~the cutest~*~ |
that's amazing... so powerful. is it written from experience? or just an idea? whichever way it's fantastic. love, peace and eyeliner angel -x- Each Moment in time is a pinprick in eternity-Marcus Aurilius |
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MoeRocko Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 166West Virginia |
THIS ONE SUCKED!!!!!!!! hahaha Just kidding *hugs* Pretty good one plus I like bumpin you  Castles made of sand slip into Sea eventually... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This is pretty raw stuff. Very sad situation that happened here. I hope it's not real, but if it is then I'm sorry. Well done though...it really hit me hard.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Jeez, Tiff. This one had such an impact it made me sick to the stomach. Like Dopes said, very raw but then that's what gives Poetry its power. It's also quite a sad piece. For it's effect it had on me, to the library it shall go. ~AF~ Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Wonderful!!! ~*applauds*~ This is very good Tiff awesome "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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