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XFalloutX
Junior Member

since 2001-05-13

Posts 31
NC

0 posted 2001-05-15 03:29 PM

She is the one for me
My heart tells me so
It skips a beat every time I see her
I wish she knew how I feel
How I wish me and her could be
But thats all it is only a wish
But I'll still love her
Till the day I die
My heart skips a beat only for her

"should I smile because we are friends or cry because thats all will ever be?"

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

1 posted 2001-05-15 03:38 PM

i like the way you ended this piecfe, it gave the poem a nice little twist at the end. good jobn on this, keep posting your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Marshalzu

Member Elite

since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

2 posted 2001-05-15 03:59 PM

I liked this piece especially the ending... good job

Mr mr Zu

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-05-15 05:12 PM

i liked it also it was nice throughout the whole poem...thanks for the read...

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

Suga_Baby
Member

since 2000-08-06

Posts 380
Maine, USA

4 posted 2001-05-15 10:40 PM

Awww I never knew you felt this way about me!! You don't even know me!*blushes*

*LMAO* hahaha great poem!

"A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep."

obscurity of cloud
Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 294
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5 posted 2001-05-15 11:05 PM

This is very decent...though try to avoid the cliche of "til the day that I die" and variations of it. Keep posting!

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

stace_co2003
Member

since 2001-03-30

Posts 497
In a dream world

6 posted 2001-05-16 03:26 PM

awwww, Patrick!! how come you never said any of this when we were dating?? so what if it was only a week!! nah, I'm just playing...you did a great job, but.....no, nevermind...you'll just tell me no!!

loves ya!!
*s*
Stace

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

7 posted 2001-05-17 03:08 AM

Well done.....I liked this one very much.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

8 posted 2001-05-18 02:40 PM

Great job on this one..Short and sweet

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

9 posted 2001-06-05 03:46 PM

Tell her......
That's all I have to say

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SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

10 posted 2001-06-05 04:13 PM

this is wonderfully sweet and YES!!! Tell her!

ethel lahootie
Member

since 2001-03-06

Posts 143
SC, USA

11 posted 2001-06-05 04:47 PM

i agree w/everyone else...TELL HER!! ull never know what really could have happened unless u tell her. find out...there is a chance that something good could come from it. and great job on the poem! i enjoyed it!

~ethel~

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

12 posted 2001-06-10 11:28 AM

I know this might sound a lil repetative...but....TELL HER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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