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~*brittt*~
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since 2001-05-09

Posts 76
East Haddam, CT

0 posted 2001-05-15 08:52 AM

This is my first post, so I'd really like to hear what you think.

Forbidden Love

All you wnated was friendship,
I could have dealt with that,
But now I've fallen for you-
There is noturning back.

My friends all think I'm craxy,
Infatuated and obsessed
And if my friends had that reaction
To you I never thought I would confess.

But now that you are leaving
And we'll probably never speak again,
I find it easier to say,
You were more than just a friend.

THIS IS A FOLLOW UP TO "FORBIDDEN LOVE"- THE GUY ENDED UP BEING A TOTAL JERK!

I knew your intentions
From the very start,
Yet whenever I was near you
All defenses fell apart

I knew I had to end it,
But lately I have come to find,
I can't control my feelings
Because my heart controls my mind.

And now I miss you though you hurt me,
Though you broke my heart in two
And even though you lied to me,
I still gave my heart to you.

You're supposed to be a man,
But you're so immature,
You played this game with me,
And now you're playing it with her.

It started out as lying,
I didn't think that could be topped,
But when you're breaking more than just my heart,
That's when it has to stop.

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
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1 posted 2001-05-15 09:19 AM

Well let me be the first to welcome you too passions, You have two very good poems and they make a great first post. Well done. Hope to see more of your work soon and sorry that the guy was a jerk.

Mr Mr Zu

" The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots" -Thomas jefferson

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SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2001-05-15 09:43 AM

Welcome!

Please check your email for a special greeting!

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*~valeria~*
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since 2001-05-15

Posts 10
East Haddam, CT

3 posted 2001-05-15 11:47 AM

hey hun these are really cute poems and he was most definitely a jerk. but don't worry you deserve more then him.

*~*~VALERIA~*~*

vixengrl04
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since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

4 posted 2001-05-15 11:51 AM

Hiya Britt, Welcome to Passions!!! You should have posted these a long time ago!! But I'm glad you finally did...You already know what I think about these poems and definitely what I think about Ken. You have no idea how big the desire is to ram a stake through his heart (Oh wait-he doenst have one!). LOL, I really hope you find someone worthy of you.

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

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5 posted 2001-05-15 12:46 PM

...i loved the flow the way you wrote it...just everything...this is such a great first post...hey and really...welcome to passions

...hope to see more...

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

6 posted 2001-05-15 01:52 PM

Welcome to Passions!!

Both of these are wonderful poems, this is an excellent first post. i hope you like it here and i hope you decide to saty for a long time. it sucks that the guy turned out to be a jerk but i'm glad you turned it into beautiful writing

keep posting your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

chas
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since 2001-04-08

Posts 101
Lynn, ma

7 posted 2001-05-15 03:11 PM

these were so good, i'm going to have to keep an eye out for your poems.

lonely*soul
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since 2001-04-05

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east haddam (moodus) ct :)

8 posted 2001-05-15 03:13 PM

dont worry britt...HE IS ICKY AND OLD ANYWAYS!!! lol good job!
*KiMMiE*

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05

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On the streets w/ people

9 posted 2001-05-15 04:02 PM

Welcome to Passions
Good job on your first post here, I hope you enjoy it here and stick around.

"Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato.

Child of the Stars

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since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

10 posted 2001-05-15 04:03 PM

Nice poems here, enjoyed. Welcome to Passions.

"I'll take in anyone who's taking off their camouflage..." ~Third Eye Blind~Camouflage

~*brittt*~
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since 2001-05-09

Posts 76
East Haddam, CT

11 posted 2001-05-16 12:35 PM

Hey guys: thanx for the replies.
Kim: He's not icky and he's not old...
Nikki: Mission Impossible- hehe...
Everyone else: thanx again!
~britt~

If you live to be 100 years old, I want to live to be 101 so I never have to live a day without you.

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

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San Juan, Puerto Rico

12 posted 2001-05-17 02:47 AM

Welcome to Passions!
Wonderful job on the poem....I enjoyed it.
Actually there's two.....weird turnabout....from lovy, to just plain get-away-from-me-jerky-boy....i don't know....weird...
but anyway, i enjoyed them.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

13 posted 2001-05-21 09:10 PM

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

Sorry I'm late at welcoming you, but better late than never, right?

Hope you enjoy PIP as much as we all do. Happy posting and reading too.

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

corey14
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since 2001-05-23

Posts 89
Boston, Mass, U.S.A.

14 posted 2001-05-23 10:38 PM

i like ur work good write

live a little everyday and when its all over you will have lived a lot

love me and i will love u hate me and i will still like you

DancinQueen

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since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

15 posted 2001-05-23 11:21 PM

ahh..people leaving, makes me cry to think about it~ but great poem..keep it up

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

~sugarpie313~
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since 2000-09-14

Posts 375
Maine, USA

16 posted 2001-05-24 06:45 PM

this was so good! too bad you had to learn it the hard way but hey... the experience leaves u with great material to use *L* that's how i see it! great job

Valerie

Why do you do what u do to me baby...you know if I could I'd do anything for you, please don't ignore me cause you know I adore you

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