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silvrduck Member
since 2000-11-05
Posts 146 |
Well I wish I had a better poem to celebrate my 100th post(yay!) lol, but oh well.. I guess this will just have to do  -------- tastes so salty in ways I see undone threw you a reason for somehow you’re missing some quick to understand? touched, undisturbed given unseasoned, sensually superb will you dare to throw it away? wouldn’t you care for what they don’t say? too many ways blinded in false hands in so many views there still are too many demands of this, amorous pursuit so unworth the waste soiled again, of bitter tastes can you trust to take this dive? what if you must, to keep this trance alive? quick to displace forget the steps i’ve taken.. quick to hold back instead, you’ll leave me forsaken.. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
quick to displace forget the steps i’ve taken.. quick to hold back instead, you’ll leave me forsaken.. i liekd this verse in this poem..good job and congrats on 100!!!  ...keep writing and replying...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
greatimages in this, i like this poem a lot. oh yeah, and congrats on your 100th, just 400 more and you can join us here senior members great job on this, keep posting all your work.Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Congrats on your 100th post... Great poem I enjoyed the read, thanx for sharing. Mr mr Zu |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hmm..I had to read this a few times. Nice thoughts, made me go deeper than the surface. Congrats. ~Carly "I'll take in anyone who's taking off their camouflage..." ~Third Eye Blind~Camouflage |
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Tangerines Junior Member
since 2001-05-07
Posts 22Richmond, Virginia |
I love this line: "forget the steps i’ve taken." Very nice poem. "I don't judge people, I just watch them till it's time to look away. I wanna look away now." - Kristin Hersh |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
So hey this was a good poem. I enjoyed it very much!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
~*applauds*~ This is really good. Excellent!!! Excellent!!! "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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