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thedarkangel Member
since 2001-05-12
Posts 74~*~the cutest~*~ |
As Darkness surounds me I long for his embrace He softly speaks my name Causing my heart to pound and race... His tender touch his soft embrace as his apple lips brush my waiting face. My eyes snap open and wait for his sweet taste but realise he's my dream and he's gone. he left, left without a trace. ~*~long distance relationships suck huh? At least it's only an hour and a half apart!!! plus how do u get those little sayings at the end of the poem?~*~ |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
this is sad, i wake up lots of mornings like this... this is well written, you did a great job expressing yourself. keep posting all your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
interesting poem..sad and the way you discribed yourf eelings was quite beautiful..thanks for the read....  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Tangerines Junior Member
since 2001-05-07
Posts 22Richmond, Virginia |
I like this a lot. Your rhyme scheme is interesting: unexpected, almost. Lots of emotion. Nice.  "I don't judge people, I just watch them till it's time to look away. I wanna look away now." - Kristin Hersh |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Awww this was really cute and I like the way you wrote it. To get those "little saying things" at the bottom of your posts, scroll up to the very top of the site and you will see a box that says "Member's Area/Help". Click there and under the first section "Utilities and Tools" you'll find where it says "Change Your Profile". Click there, enter your username and password, and then go down until you find "Signature" and then you just type in your lil quote or whatever you wanna put in there. When you're posting, click the box below that says "show signature" to show it. Sounds confusing, but you'll follow it easily! ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
This was great....i know the long distance thing...your luckier...mine is like 1000 miles away... great work! Regina "Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well vixen already informed on how to get the quotes....anyhow the poem was great. Long distant relationships can be difficult, but they do work if you have the right amount of devotion and maturity. Good luck!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was so sad!!!! Long distance relationships DEFINATELY SUCK!!!! But great job expressing how much they do!! LoL |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
This is so sad  but well done! ,Suga "A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Don't you just hate that? He'll come your way. Patience is a virtue. thanks for the read and keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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