the friend i still dont have

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lonely*soul
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since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

0 posted 2001-05-07 03:27 PM

k this one is ultimatly bad..but thats k..imma show u anyway (hehe <~~~that ryhmed!)  this is crappilyu written!  anyways..dont kill me on this one..b.c i admit it sucks  lol

shes the friend
i need in my life
shes the friend
who will take away the strife

shes the friend
who will stand by me
shes the person
i want to be

shes the friend
who will pick me up when i fall
shes the person
who will be there through it all

shes the friend
ill always want
she the person
i want to flaunt

shes the friend
who is so very close to me
but so far away
why cant she see?

shes the friend i still dont have...

wow..that was bad..lol..(and no nikki..this isnt bout u!)  anyways if u dont get it  its basically stating all these awsome traits in a friend i have..and shes a real person..but shes not actully there....as the saying goes "shes the friend ive always wanted..."  as opposed to my version..shes the friend i still dont have??  make sence?
             *KiM*

and to clear things up..this is about 1 person..i have a buncha great firends..and nikki is one of them <3  srry for the mis understanding nik!

[This message has been edited by lonely*soul (edited 05-07-2001).]

vixengrl04
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since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

1 posted 2001-05-07 04:00 PM

Kim this is good and I'm sorry that I'm not the friend that you wish you had. Hopefully you'll find that person.

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

lonely*soul
Member

since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

2 posted 2001-05-07 04:03 PM

nikki..i even said at the bottom this isnt about u!! your the perfect friend..ill tell ya who its bout later..k??? i luv you!!!
*KiM*

JBaker515

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since 2001-02-28

Posts 458
Dartmouth College

3 posted 2001-05-07 04:08 PM

great work here..

$ Jeff $ : )

"If I'm not back in 5 minutes......just wait longer!"

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banburycross
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since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

4 posted 2001-05-07 05:07 PM

i like this piece a lot, but i would leave out the explanation at the end. it's nice for the reader to be able to interpret the poem and then give you feedback accordingly, but that's just me. anyway, good job and keep posting all your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Pixie-Babe03
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since 2000-08-29

Posts 387
Central Maine

5 posted 2001-05-07 07:13 PM

this isn't as bad as you think it is! its a really beautiful poem! kepp it up!

-=Love starts with a SMILE, grows with a KISS, and ends with a TEAR=-

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

6 posted 2001-05-07 10:58 PM

Was it about me?

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

7 posted 2001-05-07 11:34 PM

i liked tis poem kim
and it wanst bad at all this was nice writing..
keep it up and thanks for sharing...cya~

:exoricst:...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

8 posted 2001-05-13 07:19 PM

Not your best....I've seen better by you, but it was ok. Hope to see more!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

~*brittt*~
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since 2001-05-09

Posts 76
East Haddam, CT

9 posted 2001-05-14 08:48 AM

Kim:
hey sweetie. i love your poem and don't worry bout it, k? she'll come around! I love you!
~britt~

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

10 posted 2001-05-15 07:21 PM

I get it!!! Sounds like the friend i dont have too!! Dont worry..hopefully we'll both find one of those wonderful friends you described.

Chel
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since 2000-07-01

Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA

11 posted 2001-05-15 07:59 PM

I liked the poem. i think at one point everyone feels the same way. Keep writing.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front."
"You are special and unique in your own way." "Always remember compliments you received; forget about the rude

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

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Twilight Zone

12 posted 2001-05-22 01:30 PM

So, when is expresing your feelings bad? As long as you're not overacting, i guess it's never bad

It was straight to the point, and sometimes that makes poems really good and easy to read. good job

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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