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XFalloutX
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since 2001-05-13
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0 posted 2001-05-13 08:10 PM



She's the love of my life
She means every thing to me
To hold her in my arms
Only a dream
To hold her in my arms
I would never let go
I would never let her fall
But it's just a dream in my head
I'm driving my self to the edge
I bring myself down
I lock myself up
Cutting the rest of the world off
The images of her running through my head
To hold her in my arms
Only a dream
To hold her in my arms
I would never let her go
I would never let her fall.......




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stace_co2003
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since 2001-03-30
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In a dream world
1 posted 2001-05-13 08:19 PM


it's great pat, but I still think you should let me beat her up. I don't like her...and I don't even know her!!!  
*s*
Stace

[This message has been edited by stace_co2003 (edited 05-13-2001).]

banburycross
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viginia
2 posted 2001-05-13 08:30 PM


Welcome to Passions!!

this is a dreat first post, it has a lot in it and took a while for me to absorb.  great writing, i know you'll love it here and i look forward to reading more of your work.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

obscurity of cloud
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3 posted 2001-05-13 08:57 PM


This has a great lyrical quality.  Great first post, i hope you share more!

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

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4 posted 2001-05-14 12:16 PM


i enjoye dthe reda a lot...and welcome to passions this is a great first pots...hope to see more... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

Ina
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5 posted 2001-05-14 08:31 AM


First of all, welcome to passions. Youre going to like it beaucoup.

Now the poem was a very good first post. Well i hope to see more.

Regina

"Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay
To say these words to you"bon jovi

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6 posted 2001-05-14 09:32 AM


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7 posted 2001-05-14 09:59 AM


Welcome to passions, I enjoyed the read and it was a good first post.
Mr Mr Zu  

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vixengrl04
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8 posted 2001-05-14 11:25 AM


OOooh I really liked this one alot, especially how you ended the poem on such a sad note.  It was great, and I hope that your dreams come true!!  Welcome To Passions! Hope to see more posts like this one.  

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

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9 posted 2001-05-14 01:50 PM


Welcome to Passions. I enjoyed this first post...awaiting the next.  
  ~Carly

"I'll take in anyone who's taking off their camouflage..." ~Third Eye Blind~Camouflage

silvrduck
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10 posted 2001-05-14 03:02 PM


Welcome to passions!
Wonderful first post! I hope you decide to post more.. I'm looking forward to reading more from you  
Sarah

*love is blind; friendship closes its eyes.*

Lakewalker
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11 posted 2001-05-14 03:03 PM


Welcome to Passions!
Good job on your first post here, I hope you enjoy the forums

"Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato.

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12 posted 2001-05-15 03:39 AM


Quite well on this one! I really enjoyed it!
Welcome to passions!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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13 posted 2001-05-15 09:12 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

Omg this relates so much to my boyfriend while we were still bestfriends...he did exactly what you described in the poem..he cut himself off from the world..he got so depressed it scared me half to death and just transformed into this whole different person because of this one girl..im glad those days are over and i hope that you keep your feet on the ground!! Great first post hun!

lonely*soul
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14 posted 2001-05-15 09:16 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS   this is a great first post  
          *KiMMie*

Suga_Baby
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15 posted 2001-05-15 09:41 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!  

This is a really good first post, I look forward to seeing more from ya  

,
Suga

"A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep."

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