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Always and Fornever (an interesting one!)
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Always and Fornever (an interesting one!) |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA 
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I hate ex's *LMAO* These poems I have been posting, for those of you who care, are getting decreasingly meaningful as my feelings for ____ continue to slide away... I'm doing 99.9% wonderful now *L* My platonic prom date might not end up being so platonic after all *L* Who knows?  xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo Always and fornever True love is not true It’s after your heart Don’t let it get to you Run, run away As fast as you can For love only weakens The power of man Lock up your heart Throw away the key That’s the only way To assure your safety Love: source of pain Heartbreak and sadness Caught in the trap Loneliness, madness Always and fornever Although I don’t love You’ll be the one My heart dreams of "A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
I am so right where you are right now with the whole platonic prom date. Like you, I so hope there is something beneath the surface. Prom is so much better when you share it with someone closer than a "chum". I totally dig the message. I love the repetition of "always and forever" definitely one of the most meaningful(to me at least) poems I have ever read here. Good job. "The heart can think of no devotion |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This read through very basically, I liked it. The rhyme scheme was simple and the stanzas kept small. Well done. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
I thought the flow wasa excellent and the rhyme scheme was good. because you kept everything short and compact it really helped the rhythm and helped get across what you were saying clearly. great job on this, i hope you have fun at the prom. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
aw...i broke up with my boyfriend three weeks before my formal ( prom )..it was terrible...and i didnt go with anyone..just went with sum girlfriends...but it was still enjoyable. Run awaaaaaaay!!! enjoyed the poem suga baby.. "Life is not long and boring, |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Hey hun I really like this, its cute... ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I like this a lot. The flow is excellent and the rhyme scheme very basic.. The poem had a simple but powerful feel. Nice job! Good luck at prom Have fun.--Marie Don't ever be someone's slogan, because you are poetry. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wonderful job....a platonic prom date? What's a platonic prom date? Oooooooooooooooo  anyway nicely done here!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Sara, it's the abscence of love that causes pain, and not love itself. I'm shocked that Dopey never said anything about this. He usually does. Besides that, I did love the poem. It was direct and easy to read. Thanks for the share "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
i agree with everyone else...must i say more *KiMMiE* |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
good solid write.. FLOWED NICELY $ Jeff $ : ) |
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Low Man's Lyric Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 236In a dream |
I think this is the first poem I read from you and I really enjoyed it. It was very interesting, especially the ending. I know how you feel and i hope the best for you. Give her two red roses, each with a note. The first note says "For the woman I love" and the second, "For my best friend." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
FUnny how acire catches onto my idiosyncracies so quickly. Yes yes....tis the absence of love that causes pain, not love itself. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Im sorry that you got hurt...You should make a shirt that says BAM....Boys Are Mean LOL...My friend has it and she made it herself...its hilarious! But yet oh-so-true |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
HAHAHA thanx for the idea, I just might have to do that!! That's great!"A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
By the way everyone, the platonic prom date is DEFINATELY still 100% platonic... personally the guy can kiss my butt *LOL* A better door has opened for me... *slams the door in Bobby's face, and walks through the newly opened one* "A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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