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dramaqueen22086
Member

since 2001-05-05

Posts 50
Hadlyme, CT

0 posted 2001-05-13 02:47 PM

hey ppl thia is for my mommy it's her b-day today, happy b-day mommy, and aunt lisa. (twins)
~!kellie!~

Age is just a thing
People dread to say

Age is just a game
That people hate to play

Age is just wisdom
That people learn in years

Age is just a memory
That takes away the tears

Age is just the love
That people give to you

Age is just a miracle
That makes all dreams come true

Age is just intelligence
That you will never feel

Age is just a number
That isn’t truly real

lonely*soul
Member

since 2001-04-05

Posts 396
east haddam (moodus) ct :)

1 posted 2001-05-13 02:56 PM

the repitition is a good touch kel..nice work!
*KiMMie*

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-05-16 04:04 AM

Well done! I'm sure your mother and aunty will adore the poem!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

3 posted 2001-05-16 04:56 AM

The coupletes added a good effect for this poem. A very nice poem to honour your mother and aunties birthday.

~AF~

Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed.
~ Unknown ~

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

4 posted 2001-05-16 09:59 AM

i like the couplets here too, i thought they were very well done. i'm sure your mom will love this piece, you did an excellent job on this.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Greeneyes617
Member

since 2000-11-22

Posts 329
Arkansas

5 posted 2001-05-16 04:48 PM

Awesome poem. I really enjoyed it.

*~*Malinda*~*

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

6 posted 2001-05-17 07:31 PM

everyone has to get old
but not everyone has to grow up

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

7 posted 2001-05-17 11:48 PM

I felt the alternation in tones of this poem was really chaotic. Wonderful! Chaos rules!

It took me for a real ride between the pros and cons of age. Worth a good laugh.
I pictured little illustrations on a card or something, with these lines to accompany them.
Great work!
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.
~Unknown

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

8 posted 2001-05-18 03:02 AM

this left me in some thoughts of what "really" the emaning of age is...which is good tho...as i enjoyed this read and hope to see more...

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

vixengrl04
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since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

9 posted 2001-05-18 11:30 AM

Hey Kel. This was really good, I bet ya momma loved it!!! Keep on posting ur awesome work, I always love it!!

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

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