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Poet on Acid
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0 posted 2001-05-10 05:55 AM


“Do you know me?”

I see your fear
It’s revealed within your eyes
Weather or not they tear
The soul never lies

I know because I’ve been there
Feeling the pain
Thinking nothing is fair
Wondering what is really sane

So I know fear
Know its taste and know its feel
And things it makes you hear
I know pain is real

Be where I’ve been
And you know too
See what I’ve seen
And you’ll know too

You try to hide it with a smile
But fear is something I can always see
It’s been quite a while
Sine anyone has fooled me

So if you know fear
You know me
If you know the taste of a tear
You’ll know me

If you’ve felt pain
You know me
If you thought you might be insane
You’ve known me

"It's too cold in the world...too cold to be alone..." - >¶Øʆ<

© Copyright 2001 Tony Ryan Johnson - All Rights Reserved
Allan Riverwood
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1 posted 2001-05-10 09:56 AM


Nice... the last two stanzas were good with their repitition.  
Still overall I didn't like this poem so much as I did some of your others.  Hope you don't mind my saying that.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

anonymousfemale
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2 posted 2001-05-10 11:33 AM


Nice work, Tony. You always know how to really twist a reader around.

Good job.  

~AF~

Stupidity killed the cat. Curiosity was framed.
~ Unknown ~

banburycross
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viginia
3 posted 2001-05-10 01:23 PM


you did a great job with the ending of this, the last few stanzas are really powerful.  i always enjoy reading your work, keep posting.

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

Ina
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4 posted 2001-05-10 01:34 PM


This was really good work. Your new stuff is awesome!

Regina

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5 posted 2001-05-12 11:41 PM


very interesting posts lately POA
thanks for the read

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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6 posted 2001-05-13 01:13 AM


i liked this poem...and enjoyed ita lot....keep writing.. ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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7 posted 2001-05-13 08:57 AM


Hey Poet on Acid.   This was all right; I think it would have been better with no rhyme scheme. Had a few great lines, though.   G'job.
  ~Carly

"I'll take in anyone who's taking off their camouflage..." ~Third Eye Blind~Camouflage

Lakewalker
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8 posted 2001-05-13 11:56 AM


I thought the ending was really good in this one, keep the poems coming.

"Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato.

silvrduck
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9 posted 2001-05-13 01:02 PM


I really liked this one... I agree, the repitition at the end was great, a nice finishing touch  
Good job, keep posting!

*love is blind; friendship closes its eyes.*

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10 posted 2001-05-17 02:36 AM


Well  done on this one. I liked the ending stanza...I thought this kicked butt.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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11 posted 2001-05-18 11:28 AM


Very nice....I really enjoyed this one...great job and keep em coming!

                                

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