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Ski*Chick
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0 posted 2001-05-13 12:19 PM



* If *
              I could bring you down from Heaven it would be today
              because it's Mother's Day and you need to be here
              with all of us buying mom flowers and a card
              Everyone would go to chruch and listen to the pastor
              then you, mom, Suvi, Maiju would have a snack
              call me on the cell "we are on our way home"
              I'd be waiting by the computer for the purple van
              as it pulled into the yard Lucy would come running to it
              because she knows there are happy people
              Then probably eat and give mom our cards
              you could give her your gift that would be
              love, flowers and a really nice card
              But that's our job now
              I love you dad alot!
              © Minna May 13, 2001

© Copyright 2001 Minna - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-05-13 01:08 PM


This is a beautiful tribute to your father's memory. These memories are what keep him alive for you, and I'm that that you are sharing them with us.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

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2 posted 2001-05-13 04:05 PM


This is really sweet.  Thank you for sharing this with everyone; it shows a true compassion in you.

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

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3 posted 2001-05-13 04:08 PM


This is well written.  I'm sorry you cant be with your dad, but he is with you.     

*~*Amanda*~*

My tears roll right down my cheeks, but they all soak into my pillow.  I feel kinda sorry for it...

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4 posted 2001-05-13 10:16 PM


Nice work, Minna!  Be sure to preserve your father's memory by always showing your mother that you love her.
Keep on truckin'.
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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5 posted 2001-05-14 12:06 PM


sweet and definily a nice tribute...thanks for sharing...great job on writing this i liekd it... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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6 posted 2001-05-16 03:41 AM


Well done on this Minna....a lot of emotion expressed.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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7 posted 2001-05-30 06:57 PM


Minna --- you simply amaze me.  You're one awesome girl.  Be strong okies  

I'm so sorry for doubting you Kit ... please forgive me!!!!

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