i know the truth - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

broken wing
Junior Member

since 2001-04-30

Posts 37

0 posted 2001-05-12 05:57 PM

blah! this sucks but o wells your stuck with it anyways. so bleah! *S*

i know the truth
i can see it in your eyes
your lips tell me sugar coated lies
but i know you lie
even when you look me in the eyes
i see through you and your deceit
i know the truth
i can see it in your eyes

"To me, fair friend, u never can be old,
For as u were when first ur eye I eyed,
Such seems ur beauty still." ~W.S.

[This message has been edited by broken wing (edited 05-12-2001).]

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-05-12 06:58 PM

short but straight to the point i liked it...very true in my opinion...great job and..keep writing...

...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

katherine
Member

since 2000-06-10

Posts 365
Canberra Australia

2 posted 2001-05-12 09:37 PM

i liked this one. it's not bad!
keep it up
katie

if you don't let them in they can't see the real you

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

3 posted 2001-05-12 10:12 PM

Yes it is very short and to the point...but yet short and sweet

Acies

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

4 posted 2001-05-14 06:20 PM

short but it doesn't lack in expression
amazing read ~*applauds*~
thanks for the beautiful read
keep sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-05-18 05:00 PM

Short and to the point. What I didn't like about it was that you used the same words to ryhme it up all the time. Anyway, on the good side, it did add some power impact within the poem.
Anyhow, I did like this and wanna read more..mas....mas...!!!!!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

HeAvEnS AnGeL
Member

since 2001-05-17

Posts 168
The Hot Girl From Canada

6 posted 2001-05-18 05:18 PM

i did like it
take more pride in your work
becoz 99.9% of the time
they are good

HeAvEnS AnGeL
Member

since 2001-05-17

Posts 168
The Hot Girl From Canada

7 posted 2001-05-18 05:18 PM

i did like it
take more pride in your work
becoz 99.9% of the time
they are good

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.