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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

0 posted 2001-05-10 10:42 PM



Do you think im incapable,
Of speaking on my own?
Words come out of my mouth,
But only in monotone.

Innoncent little girl,
Is how im percieved.
"She doesnt know any better,
So this is what she believes..".

You can all think what u want,
But this is my life.
I can speak for myself,
And what i say will be right.

Im perfectly capable,
Of taking care of myself.
Dont tell others whats right and wrong for me,
Im not a delicate angel on a wooden shelf.

Dont hold me too tight,
Or im bound to slip away.
Guide me from a distance,
And forever i'll stay.

© Copyright 2001 Michele - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-05-10 10:50 PM


wonderful chic   especially the last lines..i liked it alot! keep posting

*dq

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

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2 posted 2001-05-11 01:09 AM


Nice piece. It reminds me of the song that goes RESPECT, find out what it means to me.  

Ronil (One becomes god only when they have fully understood the role of being a human being.)

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3 posted 2001-05-11 02:54 AM


great words and how you've written them out...i really enoyed this..great job and keep sharing...i mean like... constantly!..heh just kidding...cya~... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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4 posted 2001-05-11 08:14 AM


great poem Shugar.  It was really forceful and to the point and that made it awesome.

I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to.  I never thought that I couldn't.
Life's tough, get a helmet.

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viginia
5 posted 2001-05-11 11:31 AM


this is a really nice piece, the title of it reminded me of my own quote    you are a really talented writer, i alwas like reading your work.  keep posting

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

knightlyshadows
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6 posted 2001-05-11 11:57 AM


library time!
tiff

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

U in the dark u in the pain u on the run
Living a hell living ur ghost living ur hell

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7 posted 2001-05-11 12:16 PM


good job on this. i know the feeling.
broken

"The sun in your eyes made some of the lies worth believing."


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8 posted 2001-05-11 05:59 PM


Nice work!  
It's really good to see you posting again.  
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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9 posted 2001-05-14 09:59 AM


beautiful Shugar
that was really good
as Kiley has said already, the last lines are awesome
thanks for sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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10 posted 2001-05-14 10:24 AM


Great Job on the poem   and what everyone else said...
Mr mr Zu

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11 posted 2001-05-14 11:22 AM


Good, good, good!!  Since this is sorta like the last post I read from you, I'm thinking you're going through a hard time with ppl right now.  Ppl can suck 4 sure, but you put your feelings into words very well.  I really like this one.  

~*Nikki*~

~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~

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12 posted 2001-05-18 01:52 AM


Finally a poetic way of politly saying 'back the heck away and give me my damn space' I liked this alot. It's gunna have to go to my library now.

"It's too cold in the world...too cold to be alone..." - >¶Øʆ<

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13 posted 2001-05-18 05:37 PM


I didn't much like this one....I  think you've done better. As for the message, it was a good one. Like POA interpreted hehe.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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