Teen Poetry #4 |
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Love of My Life |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world ![]() |
You are my baby- The one I love, The one my heart is dreaming of I long to feel your warm embrace taste your kiss, touch your face. I wanna be the one with you at night- Laying in your arms Holding on tight. with you I want to spend many years be there for all the joy, And dry all your tears. I still have yet to meet you, Or even see your face. But someday, down the road, I know we will embrace. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
This was awesome! Such imagery!wow Regina "Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
gawwsh that was greats!!!! the beginnin was so like awwwwww how sweet and then the end when u hadnt even met him yets! blew me away...wasnt expecting that! ur in me library for sure *clicks on da button so she wont forgets* great job on this!!!! ![]() tiff ![]() “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
very nicely written...i enjoyed this poem..a lot...keep writing... ![]() if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
i thought the poem was good, the ending seemed as if the rhyme was forced, but the rest was well writteh, keep writing, ~ab~ *~"Sometimes I wish I was a little girl again--because bruised knees heal faster than broken hearts."~* |
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Jenn Cirrincione![]() ![]()
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Wow. I can really relate to this. I mean, you can feel that strongly for someone you've never even met. I'm living proof on that one. It's a weird situation.... but I believe it is possible. Good luck. Jenn "If it's wrong to love you, then my heart just won't let me be right, cause I'm drowned in you, and I won't pull through without you by my side." Mari |
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Marshalzu![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Another great piece, keep on sharing ![]() Zu. " The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots" -Thomas jefferson |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
This is beautifully written, i like this piece a lot. the flow and rhyme of this is really good and the imagery is excellent. thanks for the read, keep posting your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Beautiful beautiful such a serene read really perfect thanks for sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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~*brittt*~ Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 76East Haddam, CT |
That was totally awsome. I love how it built up to the ending like that. PERFECT! ~*brittt*~ |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Net pal? Well done on this one. I enjoyed it. ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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