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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
ugh! i hope yall like this...i had to struggle with it. i have writters block *cries* and i cant spell  sensual oppression dark and light contrast verbal abuse tender loving care teenage desires shadows dancing shattered heart misery loves company first crush darkness dispersing broken vows can't buy love true love light won mending soul it only takes time “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Patience is a virtue ain't it? It might seems like things are going wrong but in the end they end up thr right way Great share Tiff keep em coming just make sure your only share 3 a day  "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
The last stanza was shorter in lines than were the others, this disrupted the flow somewhat. Try not to abandon a flow once you create it.  I would title the poem "Teenager" but that's just me. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked the poem. Thought you did well. I am surprised it only has 2 replies up until now. Hope to see more.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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