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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada 
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Hey everyone! Heres my poem... The waves roll upon the rocks tearing and grinding away years of life Filled with anger empty with happiness Show it the beauty teach it the hate Destroy it before it starts help it fall after it's gone Be the hate it needs don't give it the love Cause this rock pain don't let it see the horrid joy Push it out of your life So all it does is learn bitter anger and deep depression because who needs love and happiness not this rock not this rock, that is me...... Regina "Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
first off ......i like ur signature.....bon jovi  woo hoo! lolssecond......i like this poem alots! i dont recall readin ne more of ur work but im sure i haves..but i thought u did a very good job on this...im addins it to me library  because who needs love and happiness not this rock not this rock, that is me...... ^ loved that *points* tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” "u say i only here wut i want too..." [This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 05-12-2001).] |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
*clicks on da lil button to add to mes library* “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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Hacas Junior Member
since 2001-05-05
Posts 25 |
This was a very good poem Ina. Keep up the good work! "Fight for what you believe in" |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Good job on this poem, I think it really gets your point across. This part: "Cause this rock pain don't let it see the horrid joy" seemed to bother me as far as flow is concerned. You still did a really good job though  "Be kind for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle" Plato. |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
I really like your use of free verse. The abrupt positioning of "joy" was great, it puts a real caesura in the poem. Til next time!  so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i have read this couple of times and the emaning behind this poem was quite deep...i enjoyed every verse and they all went together..beayutifully....great poem...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
Thanks every one Lakewalker-i really didnt want a flow to it... You guys understand it? i dont Regina "Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Everyone needs love ~*hugs Ina*~ "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Back off Acire, that constitutes for sexual harrassment! Oooooooooo!!!!!!!! Anyway Regi, nice pic cutie *hugs* hehe So hey i really loved the ending of this poem. Very powerful. Well done regi!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Excellent poem Regina, except I don't believe you don't need love. I mean come on, Bon Jovi is your signature. That's a quote from "Always", one of the best love songs around.hmmm.... Jon P.S. Just giving you a hard time "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
Jon.....grrrrr..... sometimes we dont need love. And at that moment i was very angry lately thats been me....volatile chick Regina "Take a look at my face, there's no price I won't pay |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Ooooh  @picSecond of all... Ooooh @poemAw what the heck. @InaHehe ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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