Teen Poetry #4 |
Burned |
Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
Okay y'all this is a repost from a while ago but it is my fave out of the ones i have written so i wanted to repost it -=Burned=- Hiding from the sun For fear of getting burned Showing no emotion Beacause of what I've learned My soul is red and welted All because of you I showed you that I cared And got hurt through and through The pain will last a while I can't sleep because it stings Try to push it from my mind And think of other things Friends try to make me laugh But it only works for now Like a sunburn cream A cover will endow When the burn goes away It leaves a nice tan One that shows lessons All for love of one man. -=Love starts with a SMILE, grows with a KISS, and ends with a TEAR=- |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
wow..since ive never seen ya in the forum b4 i thought u were new..but i guess not hehe..that was soooo good, i liked it alot. awsome read~ *KiMMiE* |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I remember reading this one and it's nice to read it again. Nice to see you in here again Pixie keep sharing ok? "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
now you KNOW this is my fave, and i read it before cuz it's already in my library!! HEHEHE now go on wit ur bad self and keep writin this poo aight? LOL Love ya sis Valerie Why do you do what u do to me baby...you know if I could I'd do anything for you, please don't ignore me cause you know I adore you |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
Teenie you already know I love this, so I don't really need to tell you again... but what the hey -=Beanie=- "A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Heya Justine! So this is the poem you posted eh? It's good! Very very good! *rubs his hands together* I see why it's your favourite. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
this was a nice poem...great job and it sure is one of those poem you call your fav's thanks for sharing and keep writing... ...? if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
thanks for reposting this one.....I liked it SEA |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
This is really great!! I love the metaphor that you used with the sun, it fits so well and every word within this piece just went so well together. GREAT WORK!! I've never read anything from you before, but I think I am going to have to look for more of your work. This is going into my library for sure. Excellent! ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
Yay hehe once again i am so glad you guys liked this!! Thank you so much! *Justine* -=Love starts with a SMILE, grows with a KISS, and ends with a TEAR=- |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
*bump* |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
Ouch! HOT!! Hehe , Beanie "A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Sounds like a rough time!! I hope you get through it! You know i'm here for you. Well done tho. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Elusive^ Junior Member
since 2001-05-13
Posts 18dancing fairy land |
*big grin* I like this..i like it alot.. enough said. ''I'll TAKE a QUIET life..a HANDSHAKE of CARBON monoxide with NO alarms AND no SURPRISES..'' |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
I don't remember reading this one which is a shame because I really liked it... thanx for reposting it... Mr mr Zu " The tree of liberty must be refreshed from time to time with the blood of patriots" -Thomas jefferson |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
thank you all for the replies!! -=Love starts with a SMILE, grows with a KISS, and ends with a TEAR=- |
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