Teen Poetry #4 |
The Wood_Stock Collection : Of Life & Love. |
Wood_Stock Member
since 2001-05-09
Posts 58The little yellow |
-THE RACE- (of life & love) As life flashes before my eyes, I reflect upon life with mild surprise. To think of all that could have been, And everything I haven't seen. Of wild lies and sorry thoughts, Nothing more. I'm left distraught. A troubled soul, a heavy heart, I was left behind from the start. My race is run, and I came last, I guess I didn't run too fast. Think of all the wasted days, That have now all but gone away. What's the point when no-one cares? I might look brave but I'm really scared. Isn't life supposed to be fun? No like looking at a loaded gun. Then she came along you see, And life now makes some sense to me. I can see the runners up ahead, And slow but sure, I'll catch them yet... |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
great job...mr.woodstock..i thought this poem..in the first part was sad...then i really like the last message that turned out postive...good job..and keep writing.. ...? if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
oh yes, you'll catch them always have hope good message |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
dude i liked this muchs!!!!!! great job!!!! . o O(im gettin hungrAy) lol im a lil bit hyper this mornin if ya couldnts tells :P tiff “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
It doesn't really metter if you catch up as long as you stay in the race and finish "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
I liked this because it started out sad but ended on an inspiring note. Thats always really motivational and fun 2 read. Good job on this, I liked it alot! ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked the positive ending. It really shows me that you don't plan on giving up. I wish you luck. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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