Teen Poetry #4 |
Darkness |
Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Guess what you guys?? Its my 200th post! Slowly but surely I'm working my way up there! The Darkness is my home I can find it almost anywhere And it welcomes me With its dark embrace So I fall into this Darkness It is like a dream Except the Darkness is not my enemy It is a place to be myself To be alone No one can see me in the Darkness And my insecurity fades So that I may become me And even though I may never see this person I know she is there In the Darkness *~*Amanda*~* My tears roll right down my cheeks, but they all soak into my pillow. I feel kinda sorry for it... [This message has been edited by Heavens Tears (edited 05-11-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Ooh, cool poem. And I said that out loud! I really liked this one, very dark... very passionate, one of my favourites of yours. Congrats on the big 200! ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Only 3047 away from Allan! *~*Amanda*~* |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
these lines are quite powerful. your "thoughts on paper" turned out very well! so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame to far, we may choose something like a star |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i thought this poem..was great...youw ritten it so well..and the emaning was so real...thanks for sharing and..keep writing.. ...? if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
<~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ o o o i liked that muchs! lol thought u dids a very good job! so woo hoo 4 u!!!!!!!! lol o and obscurity i love ur signature dude!!! . o O ( r u amy obscurity?) lols tiff “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” "u say i only here wut i want too..." [This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 05-12-2001).] |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
what? who is amy obscurity?? Im confused!! |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
incredible writing, i really like the way you ended this. this may be my favortie by you thusfar, you wrote this beautifully. keep posting, come join us here senior members Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
You wrote this quite well. Happy 200!! ~*Nikki*~ ~*Of all the millions of people in the world, I'm just me.*~ |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
Ah, I can smell the goth in you from here. Takes one to know one though so maybe thats why I liked this poem so much. The title was perfect. I don't have much time to read the poems here anymore so I have to pick and choose the ones that look good by their titles and authors. I'm glad I picked this one or I wouldn't know what I had missed. "It's too cold in the world...too cold to be alone..." - >¶Øʆ< |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Hey, actually, I'm not goth. I am actually kinda girly girl with problems. But thats why I hate the stereotype. If you hang out w/ the popular crowd, everyone thinks your perfect or something. But its not true. *~*Amanda*~* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
If you like the darkness so much then post in Dark passions.....there's full of it there I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I just hope you finally find solace in the light Great write and I loved the read keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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